| "Pt. I: Burdenless" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Inuyashas_Daughter [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2007 01:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm insanely curious as to how this will all play out. Please update soon. By the way, you REALLY need to work on your transitions. They are way to rough and thusly reduce the overall quality of the story, because it makes it so it doesn't 'flow'. Also your grammar and punctuation could use a bit of a touch-up. Keep up the good work. Can't wait for an update. Inuyashas_Daughter
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Reviewed By: Lollie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2006 09:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love it. I really hope you continue writing and finish the story.
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Reviewed By: gravilove19 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2006 11:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww Poor Ritsuka so confused, and his poor mind all in tangles. Evil Kio(you should go find yayoi and get together ~.^). I can't wait for you update because I would really like to know what is going to happen.
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