Title: Hm
Reviewed By: midoricomplex [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 21:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is very OOC for both of them...but so overly so that it works! I admire your courage to pair up such an odd couple. The description and flow are nice, just a couple of grammar and punctuation errors. The only thing it's missing is chemistry. You need to hint to your reader that the two boys lust for each other before they actually act on it. With that, I'm sure this fic will be splendid.
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