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| "Lost My Sister in San Francisco" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Title: I LOVE happy endings!
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2006 00:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sad stories are great, but I still love happy endings (Especially for Fruits Basket stories, since I love so many of the characters so much). I don't think that chapter could have been any cuter! Kassie-chan's letter was so cute, she's so sweet. And I'm so glad that she is going back to Japan with them. It would be so sad if she stayed behind. Yay! Kyon-chan and Kandi-kane finally had their first kiss! And second! And third! Haha, I'm so happy, that was so sweet. That was a great chapter and a really cool ending. Sorry for such a short review but I just can't think of anything else to say. Oh yeah, also it's very impressive how quickly you wrote this story! Most people would have to take much longer on such a cool story (I'm one of those people). So thank you for working so hard on this fic and I can't wait for the next one! Ja ne! ^_^
| Title: OMG! August 19th!?
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2006 23:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My last review was on August 19th!? Uwa! I can't believe it! I'm sorry! Oh well, nothing I can do about it now. I'll just review the other chapters! Wow what a cool song! I've gotta listen to it, I've never even heard of the band though. And Kassie-chan's dance was really cool too, (Must've been fun to perform, but also really hard!) Haha, I fell for her act just like Kyon-chan. I couldn't really tell if she was in pain or if it was just an act. Almost the whole time I was like "Oh no! Is Kassie-chan dying or something!?". ^_^ Yeah, Kyon-chan and Yun-chan don't really seem like the dancing type, but I would love to see them dance, it would be funny. That's all for now, time to read the next chapter!
| Title: Track Meets and Secrets
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2006 13:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oooh, they have a secret, wonder what it is. Hopefully something good, judging by the way they were acting, it's probablly not anything bad. ^_^ I'll just have to wait and see. Yay! Kyon-chan and Kandi-kane are finally going on a real date! I'm so happy for them, they make such a cute couple! Poor Kassie-chan, she got hurt, I hope that she will be well enough to go to the festival. I think it's clear that she will go to the festival wether she's well enough or not, but it would be nice if she had healed by then. That is really cute how Kyon-chan takes such good care of her. He's such a good brother, too bad Kassie isn't a real character in Fruits Basket, that would be cool. Hm, this has been kind of a short review, I hope I'm not forgetting anything, oh well. Time to read the next chapter! ^_^
| Title: Review of Love hurts!
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2006 13:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, it's been forever since I last read any fanfics! I really need to start reading more frequently again. And I'm glad you managed to kill that evil goblin of yours, poor little hamster...at least he was avenged. Looks like Kandi-kane is seriously mad at Saa-chan, poor Kandi-kane. But that story about Saa-chan was SOOO sad! That made me cry, poor Saa-chan. I'm also a little curious about Kiriko, does she remember Saa-chan? Does she even have a personality or anything? Is she like a real person or is she like Hinako's shadow or something.(Does that even make sense?) Right after I was done crying though, I was laughing my head off! Kyon-chan and Kippei are so funny when they fight. They're both so stubborn and so protective of their sisters, I hope that the two of them can get along better someday, after all. They will be brothers-in-law. ^_^ Kippei kinda showed a different side to himself in this chapter, he's always been kinda mischievous and smart mouthed when he's arguing, but in this chapter I think he was even more like that than usual. It's pretty funny.
| Title: Those Winter Nights review.
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2006 16:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm glad that Kandi-kane and Kyon-chan made up. No matter how funny Kyon-chan is when he's mad it's still better to see them becoming more like a couple. Why does Kyon-chan hate water so much? I understand that cat's don't like water and all, but still. Swimming is so fun! How can he not like it? That's so cute how Kassie was following Kyon-chan around at the beach. But sometimes it's hard to remember exactly how old she is. She acts like a little kid, so young and innocent, kinda like Tohru-kun, except different, Tohru-kun would never call Kyon-chan 'Kitty kitty' (I love that nickname). Darn it Saa-chan! What horrible timing! They almost kissed! Poor Kandi-kane, and poor Kyon-chan too. I bet he wanted to kiss her as much as she wanted to kiss him. I hope that they get together! They make such a great couple!
| Title: Review of chapter 10!
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2006 14:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all I hope your finger is doing better. That sounds very painful. Too bad the boardwalk doesn't exist, it sounds like a really nice place. But I don't live in San Francisco so I would probably never actually go there. Aw, Kyon-chan is so jealous, but it's SOOO funny and SOOOO cute! But if Kandi-kane ever wants to be in a real relationship with Kyon-chan she really does need to learn not to go drooling over every really hot guy she sees. I loved the part when the waitresses were fighting over Yun-chan, that was so funny! But I wonder, would that work everywhere? If Yun-chan went to the grocery store you think the cashiers would fight over who got to ring him up? That would be funny. But I can see why Kandi-kane doesn't like all those Yun-chan fangirls, I'm sure that would be annoying, and little scary too. Yun-chan's fangirls are insane (Or at least most of the fictional ones are). Why did Kandi-kane even ask about the bar? Did she seriously think that Saa-chan would even consider letting her drink?
| Title: LOVED IT!
Reviewed By: Chantelle123 On: July 15, 2006 23:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hahaha..this story is so interestin! cant wait till for more! hope you post the next chapter soon =) -Your Fan! Chantelle
| Title: Review for chapter 9! ^_^
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2006 19:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So now Kassie and Kippei can get together? Yay! They make such a great couple! ^_^ And that means that Kyon-chan and Kandi-kane can get together too! Kyon-chan and Kandi-kane are SOOO kawaii together! Actually, 'kawaii' is an understatement, they are so much more than cute they're adorable! I love all the pairings in this fic. Saa-chan and Shii-chan would make a very interesting pairing, they are both so funny, but I still think that they should just stay friends. They have so much in common, but maybe they have too much in common. Maybe it's true what they say, opposites attract. Who knows. Kandi-kane's other personality is kinda weird, but I have to say that I thought Kandis was awesome. Or at least, I liked the way she yelled at Anita, Anita's such a jerk! Who knows, maybe later on she'll be nicer.
| Title: Review for chapter 8! (Sorry it took so long!)
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2006 17:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry it's been so long since I've reviewed! I haven't been reading any fanfics lately, I've been kinda busy with other things. Sorry! Poor Kandi-kane! Why doesn't Kippei understand? Doesn't he realize that Kandi-kane is doing this for him? And Kassie, doesn't he care that she could get hurt too? Well, I'm sure that he does, and I guess this must be very hard for him too. Can you imagine being so close to the one that you love but never being able to get together with them? That sure would stink. Well, Akkii-chan will kick the bucket at age 25, will Ariel die young as well? I guess they could to get together after the two of them are dead, but I'm not sure if they're willing to wait that long. And what about Kokoro and Kyon-chan? If they are trying to keep Kassie and Kippei apart then they would be total hypocrites if they became a couple. How sad. Dawn is so great, I'm glad that she can get along with the Sohma's and Tohru-kun, (I don't see how anyone can dislike them) now if only Anita could get over her petty jealousy and concentrate on what's best for Kassie.
| Title: Neeeew chapterrrrrr!
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2006 15:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Happy Birthday to you! Happy birthday to you! Happy birthday dear Inuyoukai Mitaku Kurama! Happy birthday to you! And many more! ^_^ Hot weather is never fun, I hate hot weather, do you like rain? I love rain! But that would really stink if it rained every year on your birthday and you didn't like rain. And you DO have a hobby! Writing is a great hobby! Poor Kassie, I hope she's okay. But I am VERY thankful that you didn't make Kassie and Kyon-chan die of hypothermia! That would be a HORRIBLE ending! Kippei is all mad, poor guy. He just doesn't understand why Kokoro is trying to keep them apart. If only he knew. And poor Kokoro too, I'm sure that she doesn't like for her brother to be so mad at her. I'm so excited about the next chapter! I can't wait to read it!
| Title: Poor Kandi-Kane and Kyon-chan
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2006 13:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's really lame that Kokoro and Kyo have to keep Kassie and Kippei apart. I hope that Kassie and Kippei aren't too mad at them. Darnit, why does Ariel have to be so mean? It's bad enough that Akito tries to run everyones lives but now there's Ariel too. She seems so imature and bratty, she shouldn't get to be the family head. And what does she have against Kippei? Just because he happened to be unlucky enough to be her right hand man? That stinks for Kippei. Anita is kinda mean, I can't believe that she thinks that Kyon-chan isn't a good brother! Well, actually, he never does seem too nice when you first meet him but he is! Anita and Dawn just need to give him a chance. Why is it that Dawn and Anita never call Kassie Kasumi? Is it just because they like nicknames better (Like me)?
| Title: Hmm, I can't think of a good title.
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2006 12:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hooray! More fics with the Okurimono's! I can't wait! ^_^ So Kokoro is trying to protect Kippei by keeping him and Kassie apart? Over protective older sister type of protection or is there something else? Does it have to do with the curse maybe? Or am I just over thinking things? Kassie and Kippei do make a very kawaii couple. And Kassie's story was cute too. Lol, she thought the stables were some sort of horse prison, kids have such strange imaginations. Uh oh, it looks like Anita is really jealous. But I guess that's understanable. She and Dawn pretty much were Kassie's family before Kandi-Kane and Kyon-chan showed up. So Dawn and Anita don't know about the curse, right? It doesn';t seem like they do, and why would Kassie have told them?
| Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2006 12:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! Kassie is back to normal, I'm glad that she's not mad at Kyon-chan any more. I think that Kyonkitchi and Kandi-kane make better siblings for Kassie than Anita and Dawn. I was expecting the two of them to be a lot nicer to Kyon-chan, maybe they will be later on. Kassie and Kippei will make an adorable couple, I can't wait until they get together, tht is, if they ever will. I hope they do. And then there is Kandi-Kane and Kyon-chan, if they become a couple, Kyon-chan will never hear the end of it from Kassie and Shii-chan. Sorry if this review isd shorter than the last ones, but I'm kinda trying to hurry. My onii-chan needs the computer. Oh and good luck with your laptop. Computers have a way of going back and forth between being wonderful conveniences and evil nuisances.
| Title: Wow, a new chapter already! ^_^
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2006 16:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Haha, I guessed that the next chapter wouldn't be out for a while, boy was I wrong! ^_^ Poor Kassie, she's so sad. But she shouldn't be so hard on Kyon-chan, he's doing the best he can. He neglected her before but now he has the chance to make it up to her. If only she'd let him. (The way I described it, it sounds like I'm talking about Yun-chan and Aya. But I doubt that Kassie will hold a grudge as long as Yun-chan has) I mean, Kyon-chan did forget her (And that was wrong of him) but it's not like he chose for them to be seperated. Shii-chan is SOOO funny, it's just like him to flirt with any random woman, as long as she's pretty. ^_^
| Title: Uh oh, cliffhanger.
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2006 13:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wonder who that woman could have been? I guess I'll have to wait for the next chapter to find that out. I'm so excited about the next chapter but I doubt that will be out anytime soon. I think that the FB characters have been pretty much in character. It can be hard sometimes to stick to the personality of a character that isn't yours, that I think is one thing that makes fanfiction writing SOOO hard sometimes. But I have read fics in which the characters were just completely ruined, trust me you did a good job. Kyon-chan is a very good older brother, even if he did forget about Kassie, at least now he cares about her. I mean, he's going al the way to america just to see her, and it was pretty funny when he said that Kipei better not be her boyfriend. Now that I think about it, if you're trying to get a boyfriend it would be very unfortunate to have a brother like Kyon-chan.
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