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| "The Letter" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Awwwww
Reviewed By: Shippo Gal 101 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2006 14:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awwwwww...that wuz soo cute!!Plz keep writing more chappys!!!
| Reviewed By: Elizabeth Hemingway [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2006 10:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
caged, The idea was a bit cliche, so I can't say I was thrilled to read about Kagome and a letter she wrote to InuYasha but never intended to give him. I was rather happy, however, with your fluid writing style, reminiscent of several other wonderful fanfiction authors I've had the pleasure of reading. Your writing, the essence of it I suppose, definitely kept me reading and hanging onto the story. That isn't to say this couldn't benefit from a rewrite, but I really just enjoyed seeing your style take shape here. Really, when I say the idea was cliche, I don't mean I was rolling my eyes throughout the *whole* thing! The introduction is quite nice, and it really clued me into your grasp of the characters (very nice, mind, I like your portrayal of InuYasha...until the end. That kind of left me wondering....). Your skintight InuPOV worked out well, too, in this context. I am minding the time you took in writing this, but there is just so much one can learn from pieces that have been gushed out like The Letter. I will say up front that the door metaphor was very satisfactory, but it is walking on very thin ice to vent your own frustrations through a fictional character per se. I am happy that you are happy with it, and that you seem to recognize the dangers of OOC tendencies, but bear in mind that to put yourself in your character's shoes often vies to stymie one's creative output. Just keep that confidence, it's fitting. ^_^ As you might have guesses, I think the ending was a bit OOC, or an easy solution, whichever way you like it. Might I suggest letting this idea stew, and if you still like it, perhaps you can come back with a fresh perspective? Your preview seems like a good story in the making. A strong plot and a good writer make for a good read! Keep it up :) Sincerely, EHB
| Title: Miss Mischief
Reviewed By: Miss Mischief [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2006 07:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Considering you only did it in an hour, i thought it was brill & your idea sounds interesting too.
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