Reviewed By: Tenshi of Hikari [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2006 16:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! I can't complain about the colors because I've only read a few of the manga too, sooo.... I thought it was really good. I think maybe you could double space between paragraphs but I've seen worse. I once accidently posted a story a story that I didn't double-space and it just looked like one big paragraph. *sweatdrop* Give me five seconds and I can look up the anime... hmmm... I just looked up part of the anime (from YouTube.. yes, THANK YOU GOD FOR YOUTUBE!!!) and it looks to me like Hikaru's eye color is a grayish-goldish color... Akira's hair is black and his eyes... I would say a turquoise color. But others may disagree with my colors *shrug* here watch this Anime Music Video and it shows clips from the anime with a song and you can get the colors from there http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2gAfqvnsylw Whenever you need to know what any character looks like in any anime just go to www[dot]youtube[dot]com and look up the name of the anime. I hope that helps!!! I thought you did great on your story. I am now, officially an Akira/Hikaru fan.... I drew a picture of Shindo once.... I don't think it looks good but everyone else does.... I love SAI!!! And I think you did well with your descriptions too but there was one part where the sentence was like nothing but description. And where as I may have that that one sentence was a bit much, It did add to the story so All's well that End's well. or... sometihng like that... I also kind of wish the story went further than you took it...
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