| Reviewed By: enya [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2006 18:22 CDT|
Style of Writing: 6 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10
I think you have a good start here. But if you truly do want to make a career of writing, check your grammar. You have a lot of errors facing the tenses, and a few words are missing/out of place. Also, watch your descriptions and try not to throw swearing in just for fun. Swear all you want, but think about it - People don't swear all the time. Overall, it's a fun read and a good idea. Try to drift away from the original as much as you can in the future.