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| "Digidreams Do Come True!" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: sup
Reviewed By: Renteka On: October 11, 2007 07:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm at school right now, so i can't read it, but i'll check it out later. Still banned... But no worries! Oh, and if you could report back on the chapter, it would be nice
| Title: I like your story!
Reviewed By: Genbo On: October 15, 2006 17:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please Continue When will we find out what happened to everyone that's already been taken. Over all I really like your story.
| Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: Kari Izumi [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2006 18:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
When I went to review this story for the FFRG, I didn't realize I'd already reviewed this on my own! LOL! But now that you've updated, I can give a more full-rounded review. :) First off, I'm glad you too my last suggestion to use, because it made the first chapter much more easier to read. The overall development of the characters and plots are pretty good. It's interesting to see Mimi becoming a leader and for Koushiro and Miyako to be attractive computer nerds :p And you mentioned a little in chapter two about how the younger group have drifted apart, particularly Myako and iori simply because they attend different schools. I could totally believe that. One thing that you could work on is the actual flow and structure of the story. There were places where it was a little tricky to follow who was speaking, because there hadn't been an indicator in five or so paragraphs as to who was speaking. I feel the story would also be a lot stronger if we got to feel a litte bit more about what the characters (especially Mimi in chapter one) feel about how their lives have changed since leaving their Digimon partners I did very much enjoy the AiM referrence, as well as the rest of the music referrences to Digimon. none of that seemed forced. I also liked the Valentine/White Day referrence and remembering that it's a particularly romantic (and very capitalistic!!) holiday in Japan. Overall, I did indeed enjoy this fic a whole lot, and I can't wait for more!
| Reviewed By: Kari Izumi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2006 04:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
I have to say, this is one of the best Digimon fics I've come across in a while (I found this fic via your like in the FFRG thread and saw you came over from ff.net, so I'm sure you know the crapfics that have cluttered that place up). Anyway, it was great prose and everyone was in character as they said goodbye to their Digimon. The only nit-pick I had was that most of the story was in italic. Normally that does work well for a flashback, but seeing that the flasshback *was* the whole chapter and you had already told us it was some years ago, it wasnt necessary to do so. Other than that, it was a great story, and I'll be waiting for the next chapter.
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