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| "Shadow Chronicles: The Wrath of Shadow The Hedgehog" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: I'd have to say...
Reviewed By: TheVulpineHero1 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2008 07:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm...it's a good effort, but I tend to agree with the other reviewers on this one. You tend to jump into new situations without explaining them, and then breeze into new ones just as fast. Slow the pace a little, and make sure you describe things a little more. You didn't actually have any description for the settings, so as far as the reader is concerned, it could be happening everywhere. Still, it's a league above some of the god-awful stuff I've read. At least you have a good knowledge of when and how to use capital letters(unlike other people...) I look forward to seeing you write more in the future. After all, remember th Golden Rule: Practice makes perfect. I remember how bad I used to suck...*cough* bold italics *cough* Anyway, keep writing. It's nice that someone is.
| Reviewed By: Shadow 6271 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 12:43 CDT
Comment/Review:
well, its still better than a lot of fictions ive read, but i think your looking for advice more than praise. id try and keep it at a slower pace. try and build a mood and describe more. it wouldnt have hurt to put in a chapter at the beginning that just explained Shadows doings in the world and the setting, like how did he survive, what has he been doing with himself. and his character needs working on too, quite frankly, because from the very start with "Hey Buddy" to a robot its been a bit off. hope this helps ^^
| Title: First review
Reviewed By: Solarity the Hedgehog [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2007 11:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, it not bad, but not top notch. Keep working and I'll review again!
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