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| "Such is the Life of a Youkai" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: kitsuna [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2006 17:47 CST
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Lovely lovely story! please update soon.
| Reviewed By: little-pixie n.l.i On: September 05, 2006 13:41 CDT
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soz just realize they dont let u do new lines (cant remember what they're called)!!! but i hope u still understand!!!
| Reviewed By: little-pixie n.l.o On: September 05, 2006 13:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
advice: this is a really gd begining (i would sooo luv 2 c that confused look 2!!!) but u need 2 use paragraphs! and when ppl speak u use a new line wen a new 1 speaks i.e, "hello, how are you?" "Hiya, I'm gr8 thnx how bout u?" etc ect. other than that i think its gd... o nd u need 2 make sure ppl c the thoughts even tho ur usin POV u can still use italics 2 show the persons thoughts rather than just what they see. hope its been useful and that u carry on with the story because the plot is really gd!!
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