Reviewed By:Finalfantasy7 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2006 00:08 CDT Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 4 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10 Overall Rating: 6 of 10
Comment/Review: Hmm...just between one fantasy writer to another, I must admit your beginning leaves much to be desired. It seemed incredibly rushed and I was constantly confused about the goin-ons. The story itself felt more like somebody was explaining something to me rather then me actally reading a story. My only real suggestion would be to flesh out the story some more. This may have been your point, but I just appreciate detail in stories such as these. Keep working at it and I'll keep my eye on it in the future.
