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| "As We Go Through Life" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: memorietrail@ On: April 17, 2007 21:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh wow I really like this one and hope there is more soon.please write more!
| Reviewed By: oo On: October 13, 2006 16:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic, I'm very sorry to say, needs a lot of work. There really isn't a clear direction that it's going, and the characters don't really have depth to them. You need to to separate the characters' styles and give them each their own personality when you switch POV. Try to make the whole thing sound like it came from the character's head, not like they are sitting there describing this happened, then that happened, then this happened, etc. It does have a lot of potential, however.
| Reviewed By: Serena1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2006 04:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
Great fic so far can't wait for you to update!
| Reviewed By: moimoi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2006 20:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey just thought i'd let you know that you have the same chapter up twice
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