| Reviewed By: Mikage Aya [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2007 21:36 CDT|
Hi, well. This story's got potential. I like romances, lemoned ones but I don't see it going that way. You should have special care to make dialogues real. Like they question her background, not just decide she's nice and she'll tag along. Using Toboe is good because hes very childlike but don't forget that they need to build trust. Good luck!