| "Kingdom Hearts: Sora's Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Title: Chapter 1
Reviewed By: Phoenix Hoshika [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 05:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not going to be too harsh about the chopped up sentences since this kind of thing can happen when a document is converted from one form to another but you really should have checked this and tried to fix it. The grammar needs cleaning up as I have found a lot of mistakes while reading this first chapter. Even so they can be overlooked and the story reasonably enjoyed. Try proof reading the chapters a few times, at least twice slowly (preferably out loud so you can hear how it sounds if you can do so) before posting to get rid of as many over looked errors as possible and if you can have someone else proof red it too. Last make sure it uploaded to the site properly. Despite saying you can upload html formated stories when I try it using Word it just comes out as one big block of text, so again make sure you double check your story after uploading it here. I have a little instruction on my profile on how to get past this problem so I hope you find it helpful.
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Title: canismoon
Reviewed By: Samking78 On: November 25, 2006 19:31 CST
Comment/Review:
KEEP posting! keep posting! so good ( the chapters seem to be getting shorter and shorter...) :( oh well guess i'll have to wait good luck! :)
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Reviewed By: sparklinggem On: November 08, 2006 16:24 CST
Comment/Review:
NOOOO! (such a short chapter) keep posting!
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Title: silvershadowfox
Reviewed By: scribblemonster [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2006 16:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really enjoying your fic. it's great so far! I love how you stayed true to the story and also added extra scenes it makes it so sweet!
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Title: ^-^lovebug70
Reviewed By: scribblemonster [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2006 14:44 CST
Comment/Review:
you added the whistling scene! ^-^ great story!
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Reviewed By: scribblemonster [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2006 14:42 CST
Comment/Review:
I really like how you made sora female and with riku (I am a female and boyxboy to me is pretty akward)the idea is great and I love how you mached up all the characters (lagunaxraine) (tidusxyuna). you should add more laguna and raine parts when you get the chance (I know it probably is difficult adding new charaters and scenes to the story) I'm just a big raine and laguna fan ^-^ (I also noticed how you made riku kind of jealous of laguna) if that's the direction your taking the story should get very interesting) keep posting!
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Title: Firefox17
Reviewed By: scribblemonster [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2006 14:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!!!!!!! I love how you added tidus, yuna, raine, and laguna!. raine and laguna... there story makes me sad but also happy ( my fav. characters) your story is so awsome. keep posting! and Good Luck! ^-^
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Reviewed By: Jorgie On: October 30, 2006 16:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's cool to read the story with the main character as a female. it is very fun to read and follows the game quite well.
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