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| "Jenova's Children" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Title: ....
Reviewed By: The_Scarlet_Rose [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2007 12:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa, this chapter just kinda came out of no where. At first, i didn't actually expect you to update ever again since it took so long, LOL, but then I was kinda excited when I checked and saw that there was another chapter. But this one... I dunno. Riku turns out to be Kadaj's little brother? It's so... strange. And kind of random. But really unexpected, I'll give you that. I hope you go into a lot of explaning to make the entire process very clear, as to what exactly happened to them and what not, since it's entirely different from the original story line, but in a good way. Don't get me wrong, this isn't a flame or anything. I'm still a fan of this story, but it's still pretty Emo and OOC... but I suppose I can kind of get around that. Though there are a lot of things that tend to be randomly brought up or referenced that could've been done a lot smoother or just best left out at all. Like the Edgar Allen Poe poem "The raven". That who little deal was kind of... i don't want to say pointless... because it was interesting, but unneeded. Oh, and something else that has been bothering me, is that you seem to have some aversion to using the word "Eyes" or "Hair". Sure, using 'orbs' and 'tresses' works sometimes if eyes or hair is used a lot in a small frame of text, but just using it repeatedly makes me want to poke myself in the eye. No offense or anything. I keep making this sound like a flame, when I'm not flaming you or anything because it is a really good story, you just have some rough patches that aggravate my pet peeves take away from the story. Though, one thing I do hope you plan to do is to get a bit more indepth about Tifa and Cloud's relationship. Granted, I know the story isn't really about them... however... I'd like to know a bit more about how they came to start dating ya know? maybe as a bit of a side note? ANYWAYS, this is probably the longest review I've ever left, and I've got to get to class, LOL. UPDATE SOON!! --Scarlet
| Title: pretty good..
Reviewed By: The_Scarlet_Rose [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2007 17:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story started off so good, but it seems like all of the characters started getting extremely OOC, and then I dunno.. I'm still going to keep reading it though... alright then. --Scarlet
| Title: Wow...
Reviewed By: The_Scarlet_Rose [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2007 17:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm usually not a huge fan of FF fanfics but this one is pretty promising. So far I've read the first chapter... but I think I'm going to stick through the whole series if it keeps on being this good. I love that it's a Riku fic and not the overused Sora one. And also, sweet title, that's what first caught my eye Good Chappy Scarlet
| Title: Quote the Raven Nevermore
Reviewed By: FFXInuyasha1 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2006 13:34 CST
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Death upon death nothing but death upon this barren land...oh my bad ummm I loved the new chapter finally an update! The swearing fit Kadaj's character but one thing that got my was that the quotes were in riddles meaning: it was perfect! Keep it up!
| Title: Great Work
Reviewed By: kiwi711 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2006 13:34 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The best Final Fantasy/Kingdom Hearts Crossover I've read, but don't tell anyone. Adding it to my favorites and waiting for the next update. Please update soon!
| Title: Almost a month
Reviewed By: FFXInuyasha1 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2006 20:08 CST
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Nearly a month since the last review. Please...dammit I'm actually saying this please update.
| Title: Couldn't stop
Reviewed By: FFXInuyasha1 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2006 14:06 CST
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Comedy fits in perfect! Action scenes awesome A+ vatos!
| Title: Impressive
Reviewed By: FFXInuyasha1 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2006 11:54 CST
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I've never seen so many things that are true wrapped into one package! I mean-it's perfect! There's nothing to criticize about this story to put it simply I love it! Damn good work man damn good work! You have my attention and I'm adding it to my favorites! Don't let me down because I have high expectations for this fanfic! FFXInuyasha1.
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