| "Chp1:A Not So Typical Day" Reviews/Comments [ 30 ] |
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2007 16:52 CST
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*does a little random dance that makes people stare as if she were crazy* THIS IS AWESOME!!!!
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2007 16:19 CST
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AWWWW!! If I were in Shute's position I would have done the same. I'm to caring toward others who need help or close to me.
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2007 16:06 CST
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SWEET!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: FennFeatherDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2007 11:48 CST
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Okay so they're going for a distraction. But what kind of distraction? Get them seperated and take them out one at a time and with everone confused grab Choas? Eh, just an idea. Little bit of friction between Choas and Baku, they say you fight the most with those you care about the most.
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Title: Great
Reviewed By: PrincessMoonShadow [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2007 22:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love it! I especially love the interaction between Baku and Chaos.
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Reviewed By: FennFeatherDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2007 16:29 CST
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Yes your back. Very well done chapter. Hmmm... boyfriend for Choas, I'm leaning towards Guneagle. But do whatever. Can't wait for the next one.
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Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2007 05:16 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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I thought Baku always picking on Chaos was pretty cute, but I'm biased. ;3 Hurrhurr. ChaosShute wouldn't make sense, but it's the closest feel to it since the beginning... 6.6; Mmm. Well, whatever you want to do. :] This is turning out to be pretty interesting! In ch 3 you wrote this: "write down Destroyers `insensible' idea." And you meant NONsensible. There's no such thing as insensible, that's just *nonesense*. xD Get it? Mmkay, now with that little English lesson over, I absolutely *loved* the part with: Grappler, hurry up before this human gives me some sort of disease!" Zapper yelled, interrupting Grappler. "Oh I only wish."-- That's pricless. XD Great job so far, update asap! :3 And review back maybe?
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Title: Wonderful
Reviewed By: PrincessMoonShadow On: February 06, 2007 01:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I simply injoyed the chapter alot,I think she should and I like either with guneagle or captian.
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Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2006 11:20 CST
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This is going good so far! n.n I know it's hard, but maybe try to add more description to when people are speaking? :3 Nice surprise with Chaos! Update soon!
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Title: O___O
Reviewed By: Sayla_Gathermoon (too lazy to log in) On: December 08, 2006 11:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoah. I did not see that coming. So Chaos is a she, and she's on the run from the Dark Axis. Cool story. Update soon.
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Reviewed By: FennFeatherDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2006 22:47 CST
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Woah! Chaos is a she!? Okay. Your action decribing is very well done and smilar to the series. personaly, I would have thought that Madnug would have been more capable of building a gundam snice he is a professor and all. But Grappler, eh. He's got the IQ.
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Reviewed By: FennFeatherDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2006 12:49 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Besides some grammer and spelling errors Very well done. Don't leave him to die. Please contiue. I must know what happens to him.
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Reviewed By: Sayla_Gathermoon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2006 19:15 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool story. I like it.
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Title: Not bad at all
Reviewed By: Charon the Sabercat (no loggy inny) On: November 09, 2006 19:40 CST
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Despite the few grammatical hang-ups, this is a pretty good fic. Interesting dialogue, action is described well, and you got into everybody's minds effortlessly. The new character has both a forceful and subtle introduction, something most people couldn't dream of getting away with. Simple stuff, though. Every line of dialogue is a new paragraph. Remember that. Can't wait to see more.
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Reviewed By: FennFeatherDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2006 15:49 CST
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I like your writing style. There were a few spelling errors but nothing major. Who is this strange figure. I highly incourage you to continue. And welcome to MediaMiner.
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