|"A delicate Flower" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ]|
| Reviewed By: K-101 On: May 19, 2007 16:25 CDT|
I'm really writing this to Vuirneen. Rune didn't shout "Wate!" He was beginning to summon Water but didn't have time to say the ending of that because Kharl came. Great story, BTW! I love the pairing, cuz it's original in every way!
| Reviewed By: Dragon of Dreams On: January 31, 2007 13:35 CST|
Style of Writing: 9 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
I really like how this started. It's very good, just make sure you check over your chapters, but i think i only saw one mistake so you did really good. I love it, please update as soon as possible. this story is completely orginal and extermly enjoyable.
| Reviewed By: Vuirneen [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2006 04:24 CST|
It really came into its own when you started to describe how Rune was feeling. Kharl's actions were unexpected and Rune blamed the dragons a little too much, but it was still a nice story. There was a glaring typo, when Rune shouted WATE!, instead of "WAIT", but not so many others. This one obviously stood out because it's in caps.