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Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2002 23:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
The only nitpicks I have are grammatical. I noticed this in the first chapter, too.
"Blah", said Character X.
Correct: "Blah," said Character X.
Punctuation goes inside quotation marks. ^_^
Remember your tenses! :D "You're mom is nice." should be "Your mom is nice." 'You're' is a contraction for 'you are' -- 'your' is possessive. I'm sure you already know this, but I'm just one of those long-winded reviewers :D Gomen! Great job so far. |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2002 23:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ut ohs...^_~ |
Reviewed By: Ballistic On: August 05, 2002 21:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
I write this fic on a palm pilot. It is very hard to see the screen. Also when I convert it to word documents, sometimes a word or something isn't changed well, and it comes out as a typo. I usually don't have much time to proof read, but I have been trying on my last few chapters... |
Reviewed By: xT-Zealot [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2002 09:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is cool! I like this fic! |
Reviewed By: akira On: June 21, 2002 11:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's the best story i ever read.
pleas keep going. |
Reviewed By: LifeSenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2002 20:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this, Ballistic. I love the way you wrote the characters, and overall this is a great fanfic. Also, I really liked the battle and the way you made Gohan turn Super-Saiya-jin, especially since you made it the same reason he did in the show.
I can't wait until you post chapter twelve! |
Reviewed By: Ballistic On: June 11, 2002 20:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hmm... I believe the concensus is MORE!!!! I am currently writing the first fight scene and the start of the real meat of the fiction. If any of you are artists that would like to give me a hand with a character design, you can email me at slasher641096118@aol.com and I'll tell you what I'd like you to draw. |
Reviewed By: Dagger On: June 11, 2002 20:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Write more, MORE I TELL YA!!!!!!! its really good. keep up the good work! |
Reviewed By: The Alimghty God of Cheese, Crackers and Communism On: June 03, 2002 07:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
Great fic. Write more soon please |
Reviewed By: DBZFANCATICGULF On: May 12, 2002 21:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
You are the man. Your story rocks! I like the cross over. You have big potential. Keep up the shit! |
Reviewed By: person On: May 12, 2002 16:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
you wrote more! thank you!
i still think it's good, and i need more. ;) |
Reviewed By: Greymalken On: May 12, 2002 01:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
not abd, it has potential, keep writing i want ot read more. |
Reviewed By: Dark princess On: May 11, 2002 01:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
too cool! i love pokemon/DBZ crossovers. this is like the fic 'Flying Away' but with chibi Gohan instead of Pan. i really like this plz continue.
~*~Dark Princess~*~ |
Reviewed By: person On: May 09, 2002 23:43 CDT
Comment/Review:
*ahem* MORE!
please? oh yeah, and a name, pokeball z. whatca think of that? heheh...
anywz, MORE! |
Reviewed By: SilentWillow920 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2002 23:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this fanfic. It's a great idea, but not completely original. Still, you wrote it beautifully, though I would prefer to see some more detailed descriptions. I would also advise that you proofread before posting. I saw many typos, though they could easilly be remedied with a quick proofread (a spell check doesn't get them all, don't be fooled. Grammer check doesn't either as I have found out with my own stories ;) ) Your style of writing is beautiful and you captured the characters well, though some scenes I feel that Gohan is acting a bit too maturely and wisely for his age and some of his decisions seem based on hunches or knowledge that, unless you are hinting at something supernatural, he couldn't possibly know. Of course, these are few and far between. Overall, I loved this fic and I will be waiting impatiently, as every rabid fan does, for more. Keep writing and I'll watch for your name on the Featured Fanfics ;) |
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