| "Inuyasha: A Feudal Fairy Tale: Flight of the Gray Pheonix" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: MadMistress65 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2008 13:41 CST
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I have to be honest in that I have no idea where you seem to be going with this. It actually started out like I was reading a script to a play. However, due to the miniscule word count of this first chapter, I think it only fair to hold any further comment until I am able to read future chapters.
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Reviewed By: Alliecoolgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2007 22:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ummmmmm ok The concept is good but that was one heck of a short chapter.
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Reviewed By: dragoon-tyjet [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2007 22:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad for a start. Though i personally think that you describe the actions too much. You have already told the reader that his back is to the tree and that he slumped down to the ground. You d not need to say with his back to the tree again. Overall its a great start but follow your own advice and reread it a dozen or so times before posting. Good luck :)
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Reviewed By: Zegas On: August 02, 2007 23:55 CDT
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I liked it. I love the "hint" idea that you may be using youre pin name "Grey Phoenix" in your story. As for onnamiko, why don't you get on line ang get your own account so you can post your reviews without hiding. My name is Nekomew, account wize, so I've not much to fear. Grow up, people can flame for whatever reason they please. Update soon, Grey Phoenix... I liked it.
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Reviewed By: Sleyman [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2007 01:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, you did review my story, so I thought I'd give this one a squiz... A little awkward, really- but that's just me. I have to deduct some points for writing style since I got confused a few times (when the story actually began). Grammar: Dooble spacing- yargh! Enjoyment: Much shortness and uncomprehendingengnesseses...nes...yeah! But I can see it going places, certainly. I'll just have to sit on my thumbs -and maybe write a little- until the next chapter bowls in. Oh, and onnamiko: WTF? That wasn't even a review, ya fool!
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Reviewed By: flight815kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2007 22:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
figured i would read yours since you read mine. i'll be sure to give you more info in my upcoming chapters. i like where your story has started and would like you to continue asap.
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Reviewed By: onnamiko On: February 09, 2007 20:21 CST
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I read that review you had for It's all about Hermoine and I just want to tell you to shut up! The point of a fanfic is to write what you want to happen! It doesn't matter if they are out ooc. I think its even better then, Cuz when they are you won't have the same things over and over again. For example, Kagome and Inuyasha are usually together. But for a fanfic you can change emotions. I really don't know why I am writing to you its ( just a wate of my time) because by the way you are thinking you are closed minded and will believe what you want to believe. So screw you. Screw your baka thoughts. And when you post a comment on someone's story actually make it good.
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Title: hmm
Reviewed By: Bate [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2007 17:38 CST
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Well, your disclaimer was longer than the actual chapter.. :P :) I'll have to come back and see the next chapter to be able to actually form an opinion.. :) (I know I haven't updated my own story in a long while, and I'm impressed people still nag me about it.. I got to admit I feel very bad about having been so lazy, but I do actually hope to finish up the story.. And thank you for the review.. :))
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Reviewed By: janomaru [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2006 16:01 CST
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Sweet idea keep it up
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