| "Quintessence" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Reviewed By: Brit On: June 15, 2003 21:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
Maybe I should explain why I didn't give you all tens with some constructive criticism. It's just a little thing (probably not even worth taking points off of), but every once in awhile, you tend to want to change tense. For the most part, it looked like you wanted this fic to be in past tense, but occasionally you switched over to present. Now I haven't read your other works yet, so I don't if this is just a bad habit or something that gets overlooked, but you might wanna check on that. Really I think most people could care less, but I just wanted to point that tiny error out to you so that you can perfect your writing. That's really all you need to do to perfect it. You're one of the better writers I've come across on MM.org. Once again, loved your story. |
Reviewed By: Brit On: June 15, 2003 21:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well done. I enjoyed it a lot. Personally (although I see your other readers would not agree) I think your first ending might've been the better one since it held more emotion (a real tear-jerker, it was), but the alternate ending was good too - very sweet. It gave me that warm, fuzzy feeling inside. |
Reviewed By: Cartman On: March 08, 2003 20:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great the gloom form the first ending is cleared. Both endings have there merits and I can accept either, though I'm partial to the "happy" one. |
Reviewed By: Zellia On: March 08, 2003 18:00 CST
Comment/Review:
Now that is an ending! Both endings can satisfy person whether you wanted her to live in the end or die. |
Reviewed By: Eric On: March 08, 2003 12:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Much, much, more pleasing conclusion. Not that the first one wasn't written well, but readers secretly like happy endings for their favorite characters. I know I do. |
Reviewed By: Shampoo On: March 08, 2003 09:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Shampoo forgive you now. Good alternative ending. |
Reviewed By: Kiki ^^ On: March 08, 2003 09:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah, not a bad ending. Still think it's hilarious how outraged everyone got when you killed off Relena, myself included. |
Reviewed By: Eric On: January 25, 2003 12:18 CST
Comment/Review:
You had me up until the ending...sigh. |
Reviewed By: ***** On: January 23, 2003 22:34 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it would be cool to have two alternate endings. One for the pro-Relena squad and one for haters! HA. I'm pro myself. |
Reviewed By: Shampoo On: January 23, 2003 16:17 CST
Comment/Review:
Shampoo no forgive you! You kill Relena! But since you're adding on a new ending, that's cool. Did dig the rest of it though. |
Reviewed By: Kiki On: January 23, 2003 16:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah, please do write an alternative ending. Amazingly cool as this story is, people usually HATE the death of a charcter they like. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Cartman On: January 22, 2003 21:03 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You killed Relena! You bastard...sorry, I couldn't resist. Well written even though the ending was sad. |
Reviewed By: Mia On: January 21, 2003 11:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You killed Relena! I'll never forgive you. LOL. Good story even if you killed off my favorite character. |
Reviewed By: Zellia On: December 29, 2002 17:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty darn good. I know I liked it. |
