Reviewed By: xXx_Wings_of_a_demon_xXx [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2007 18:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! i got the first Post!! I like the way that you've writen this story, It has a nice flow. But you should really add more detail, and make the chapters longer. That, and the fact that the HTML tags are driving me nuts. Can you find a way to get those off? They really take away from the story's over-all rating. That, and the fact that your laking characterization. The fact that I can't feel what the characters are, that I can't hear what their thinking- it really cuts me off from the story. If you could maybe add a bi more mental dialogue, It would improve alot. Keep going, I'll be right here waiting! =^^=
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