Reviewed By: LifeSenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2002 12:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think if you added more detail--and more puncuation--this would be a better fic. Look it over and revise it a bit. Trust, it will be a much better story. Right now, it seems as if a very...very...young...person wrote this. But as I said, fix it up a little and it'll be great.
You portrayed the characters pretty well, so there's no need to fix that! |
