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| "Immortal love" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: its me the author
Reviewed By: XxthreecheersforsweetrevengexX [MediaMiner Member] On: May 20, 2007 12:29 CDT
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well the poem is a little awkward to read but the character is going through an awkward time. usually in my poems i try to put a confusing aspect to it that leaves the reader wondering "what did she mean by that" and to get them to go deep into thought about it and develop thier own meaning for the poem. to me it dident really matter how the stanzas were as long as i did not completely trash the flow which in my opinion i did not. the poem emergency room has a hidden meaning and its not exactly what i seems read it agian if you will. the reason i dont tell my reason behind the poem or the story or what the poem means is because it really doesent have a set meaning to it. it does to me but readers have to have an original way to connect this poem to thier life or things they have seen. the poem is pretty long but thats to confuse you as to what i mean. and i have hired a editor(raige) who is doing a wonderful job helping me with my quite stupied and obvious mistakes. man that was alot of typeing and i would love to know how readers connect to the poem it would be great for you to send in your storys so that i could start some type of group of connections like add them as chapters after the poem so other people can read them and stuff. please send your storys or how you connect to this poem to the address xxxthreecheersforsweetrevengexxx@yahoo.com or poem responces to the poem i will publish them with your permission under my poem the emergency room and i really appreciate your reviews
| Reviewed By: shipporinKIMS11 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2007 19:19 CDT
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I like it, its sad though. Hey Diabolik Affinity, i really liked The Emergency Room!!! *sticks out tounge(sp(I suk)?)*. anyways, i like depressing poems...lol.
| Title: stormyclouds
Reviewed By: stormyclouds [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2007 08:29 CDT
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morbid...but lovely almost like the blackened flower still blooming in the dead of winter...it's petals covered in the ice left behind by the bitter life forgotten in time...
| Title: Good, not great... but still good
Reviewed By: Diabolik Affinity [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2007 11:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is a nice small piece, at least compared to the emergency room. It has a nice rhyming scheme but your syllables are off. One stanza will be really long while the next one that rhymes with it will be three words long, just a little uneven. So it makes it odd to read. Also, just as in emergency room, you have some spelling errors, if I may say. other than that, it's quite good.
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