| "Within Broken Ties" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
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Reviewed By: Russell On: September 18, 2007 20:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well its coming along realy nice. I only have a few suggestions. The story is kinda jumpy. you need to add more detailes between events. Also you should make sasuke a total bad ass come part 2. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2007 03:16 CDT
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That was a good chapter and since they have a week till they leave you shold have Naruto/Ino and Shikamaru kick that bastards as I mean Kiba and also sorry for being upset and leaving thos reviews saying how you made Hinata so easy to have her sorry about this by having her spread her legs for Kiba on the first date when I thought she had such a huge crush on Naruto anyways I am sorry about that oh well please update soon and please have them kick Kiba`s ass so Naruto can get his stuff back lol hell if Tsunade finds out that Kiba stole the necklace lol I wouldn`t want to be Kiba ok well PLEASE UPDATE SOON
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Title: Not too late for Naru/Saku
Reviewed By: MandalorianJedi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2007 00:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I totally love this fic and eagerly await what's coming next. Though you've pulled away from Naru/Saku there is always a chance that the memory jutsu Sasuke used could break and it would be interesting to see Sakura's reaction to Sasuke when/if she ever finds out. Plus, Naruto and Ino's reactions and action in the aftermath of that would be pretty interesting as well. Jusr food for thought. Keep up the great work, I'm definitely watching out for more updates of this fic. It was also pretty shocking for Chouji to die, and definitely a pretty cool combination with the Ino/Shika/Naru formation with Ero-Sennin as their sensei. Definitely original, so kudos for that. Update soon! You're doing great!
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Title: Enough!
Reviewed By: masterq523 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2007 09:58 CDT
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Okay, I need to say something all of you people need to stop mentioning other fanfics and comparing mine to them, Stop complaining about the same thing twice in a row and DEFINATELY stop argueing on my review list!!! Okay?
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Reviewed By: Rokubi no Rajuu On: July 18, 2007 23:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey spiritwolf30 Tsunami227 does that because people are to don't wait for her to update and has low visits on the fanfics so Tsunami227 deletes them but I see what you mean by that ,and Tsunami227 is mix time between schools and writing and it not working out. I think Tsunami227 needs a beta to help but I can't because I'm not a member of this site at all so could some one help please, people like the fanfiics but can't get them out in time so that is my tinking on that. Also masterq523 great fanfic keep it up and by the way it saids update but I don't see one in the story just to let you know, Thank you from for "Friendly Internet guy Rokubi no Rajuu" PEACE OUT.
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2007 13:26 CDT
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I really like the story and I love the pairring in my opinion I say let both Sakura and mainly Sasuke die ok just Sasuke all because I hate that Bastard and with Saukra let her get a second chance but have it is over between that Naruto doesn`t want her anymore since he has Ino who is a hottie but I will still say now Hinata seems easy to have sex on the first date and about her crush with Naruto its sure enough loos like it wasn`t that big of a crush but that is ok I still really like this story and just hope that our going to update someday
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Title: WoW
Reviewed By: Skittles19 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2007 01:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
its a good story! i cant wait for the next chapters. what happened to sasuke & sakura?? how will they get the two back??
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Reviewed By: inu 4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2007 13:40 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey what about sakura and sasuke? this is sakuras path isn't it? I want them both to kill Orochimaru
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2007 14:18 CDT
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I really like this story and like the other person said this is a rare pairring but I saw this pairring in one other story called Unchained Memory the onl prblem that author seems like he or she doesn`t like to update it and with the author who wrote these Puppeteer and Five Tails now that person I doubt the story Five Tails will ever get updated again and also that author has a habit of starting a story write one or 2 chapters then goes and writes another story and stops updating the other stories he or she has already started to the point where he or she has to get rid or it so it can write yet another do oh sorry for rambling ok about your story I liked this chapter it was long and I am also sorry to sound like I am complainning but Hinata now she is easy and I thoght she had a huge crush on Naruto that she wants to be with him but she goes on one date with Kiba they go to dinner and since her dad wasn`t home and Neji wasn`t there she so she has sex with Kiba and yes I know she knows Kiba for what couple of months oh well I guess her crush on Naruto wasn`t that big oh well and sorry about that I don`t know why I am complainning about that since this is a Naruto/Ino pairring and plus it is your story so I am sorry but I really do like your story and cann`t wait till you update again so keep u the good work
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Reviewed By: Rokubi no Rajuu On: July 08, 2007 19:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
By the way you ended the last chapter( before the pairing switch it who be very hard to get Sakura away for Sasuke and still have Sakura like Naruto s I say good job chaging the pairing up. NaruIno is a very rare couple the only time I've seen that is in Puppeteer and Five Tails so very intersecting choice even if thier you favorite couple.
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2007 15:25 CDT
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That was cool I really like that very very rare pairring the thing is alomost every author I talk to says Naruto/Ino or Naruto/Tenten pairrings hell anybody other than Hinata and Sakura are hard to write about I think that is wy everybody makes there story with the pairring of Naruto/Hinata because it is easy but anyways thank yo for making it a different pairring and I really like this pairring but the only problem is Ino she seems kinda easy and fast what I mean is fast to comfort Naruto the way it sounded she would ready to have sex with him just to comfort him if not for the nurse to come in and wouldn`t she be really sad since her own team was killed I can see them getting together because of what happened and nipping at his ear wow oh well I really like your story now that you change the pairring anyways please update soon please
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2007 15:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
Well so far the story seems pretty good but I hate to say it but the chapters seemd kinda short other than that I guess it is ok so far please update soon
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Reviewed By: inu 4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2007 12:24 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Plz update wouldya? I luv this fic so u kust have to udpate. plzplzplzplzplzplz. update i luv it
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Reviewed By: peregrine829 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2007 10:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I definitely want to see where this is going.
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Reviewed By: kiel1591 On: May 05, 2007 18:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah i liked it
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