| "A Broken Heart Healed By Another" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Title: Ten Times Worse
Reviewed By: MisfitBride [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2008 04:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know? This is the third time I have written a flame for this story. The first two times, i deleted them. I thought maybe I could just re-write a chapter for you and help you out here and there with some tips. No, i can't do it. You're writing is atrocious. You originally said you would quit if another "flamer" was left. Well this is a flame and I'm telling you to delete all your stories and stop writing. According to your profile you are seventeen. Wow, i suggest a tutor if you plan on completing school. But please don't have too high of hopes for a career, we really don't need another George Bush. Just to let you know, there is a button towards the top of your keyboard labeled "F7". If you are writing your stories via Microsoft Word; press that button and MOST of your idiotic mistakes are fixed. Also on another note; if you plan to insult anyone else's writing, i would re-think that. Hitsugaya definitely could use a beta and some schooling at times but her stories are not nearly as bad as yours. Your credibility is horrible and you should never have written that flame knowing your stories are this bad. The stories you wrote on the other website are just as bad as these ones. So where you got the "ten times better" thought from, i will never know nor do i want to know. It is time for you to put down the pencil and paper (metaphorically speaking) and pick up a job application to In-and-Out Burger or McDonald's. I hope you are competent enough to understand a ticket that has someones order written on it. Just please don't try to take someones order, lord knows you'll screw that up too and the whole business will fail. Well please enjoy your mediocre life! ^_^ I'm going to go see what other stories you have written on mediaminer!
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Reviewed By: Inuyashalover161 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2007 15:43 CST
Comment/Review:
THANKS FOR THE REVIEWS NONE OF YOU OFFEND ME I AGREE WITH YOU BUT GRAMMAR IS JUST NOT MY SUBJECT LOL IM NOT VERY GOOD WITH GRAMMAR IF ANY OF YOU ARE GOOD THEN COULD SOMEONE PLEASE HELP ME BECAUSE I KNOW I SUCK I WILL NOT LIE LOL ALL RIGHT WELL THATS IT IM THINK OF UPDATING SOMETIME LATER ON WHEN I FINISH WRITING THE NEXT CHAPTER IF YOU LIKE THIS STORY PLEASE FEEL FREE TO CHECK OUT THE STORIES I AM CURRENTLY WORKING ON AT A-SINGLE-SPARK.COM MY USER NAME IS LORDSESSHOMARULOVER161 I THINK YOU WILL LIKE THOSE STORIES BETTER THERE I TOOK ALOT OF TIME ON THOSE FOR THESE STORIES ON MEDIAMINER I KIND OF RUSHED THEM A BIT SO FILL FREE TO DROP BY A-SINGLE-SPARK.COM AND READ THEM I MYSELF THINK THEY ARE TEN TIMES BETTER THAN THE STORIES I HAVE WRITTEN BEFORE BUT LIKE I SAID BEFORE I AM NOT DONE WITH THE ONES ON MEDIAMINER.ORG THEY WILL BE FINISHED EVENTUALLY AND IF OVER YOU ARE BETA READERS I AM LOOKING FOR A BETA READER TO MAKE MY STORIES MORE READABLE AND UNDERSTANDABLE SO PLEASE DO KEEP THAT IN MIND IF YOU ARE INTERESTED MY EMAIL ADDRESS IS SKATER_GIRL15_SK@HOTMAIL.COM JUST WRITE ME A SHORT EMAIL LETTING ME KNOW YOUR INTERESTED AND ILL BE SURE TO GET BACK TO YOU WELL THERE ISN'T MUCH ELSE TO SAY AND BY THE WAY I THANK YOU ALL FOR YOUR HONESTY THAT REALLY LETS ME KNOW THE OUTLOOK OF MY STORY TO THE READERS AND THE ERRORS I HAVE MADE WITH YOUR HELP I HOPE TO FIX ALL ERRORS MY MAKE MY STORIES MORE ENJOYABLE WELL THANK YOU AGAIN INUYASHALOVER161 SHEENA KINSELLA :p
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Reviewed By: theblackangels_ [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2007 16:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
im not criticizing you. i think ur story's terrific. so if i insulted you in the review b4. im sorry.. TBA
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Reviewed By: theblackangels_ [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2007 16:02 CST
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to maybe make the story better. (im not criticizing you) you might want to put some sentences apart. and add 'kagome said, kagome replied, ect. its alot easier to figure out who's sayin what. and you could just add apostrophes in front of a sentence . so that means they are thinking some thing. that way u dont have to make parentheses. and it will be esier to read. once again i think the sorty's great. just that its hard to tell who's talking. and u dont have to make the words bold or italics if u dont want to. i just want to help. not criticizing u. i thought it would be easier. if u dont need my advice/ help. you dont have to. it was only a suggestion. TBA
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Reviewed By: lady wolf rider of the forest On: August 12, 2007 17:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
goog plot but really hard to undersand try spacing and "" instead of () it is what they are made for
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Reviewed By: Inuyashalover161 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2007 23:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
i will not be posting anymore chapters if i keep getting flamers
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Reviewed By: angel :-) On: May 23, 2007 16:40 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry to way but I couldn't really get more then 1 chapter into your story. You have good ideas, don't get me wrong, and your wording is ok (though could use some spacing or a bit of action in between). There's only 1 big problem I saw, your formating. You need to work on your spacing and paragraphs a bit. One thing I've seen authors do is if they're just putting in dialogue then start a new line after each person. That will make it longer but it also makes it easier to read because usually you can tell who's saying what. I didn't really check grammer or spalling but it looked alright.(not that i can say much in that area) I'm not telling you how to write your story, I'm just saying it may be a bit easier on us readers. Again good idea though.
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Reviewed By: Aylese1989 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2007 11:14 CDT
Comment/Review:
Cute story you got here
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