Reviewed By: Acid Rain On: July 30, 2005 16:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Once you get past the fact that Wu Fei is spelled wufie, and that duo is about as in character as if he had been played by christopher Lee, the glaring errors in this peice of writing just about killed me off. the Enter Key is your friend. Learn to use his help. Learn about a thing called 'Paragraphs'. Either use quotation marks or don't, don't start at the beginning with them and then quit after getting my hopes up that you had some kind of ability to write. Set a scene. at no time do i know where your characters actually *are*, its like they're floating in space with no reference point. Aside from using your inplace of you're, and their instead of there, you could not even spell 'solo' consistantly - I was wondering who Slol was. and what in the heck is with ending the fic with an unfinished sentence? Get a spellchecker, a grammar checker, a beta reader, and a clue. Mary Sue's suck. Original characters should be original, not based on yourself. Yeah. I know this is harsh. But do not put up blatantly unedited trash if you don't want people to pick it apart. BETA next time.
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