| "Indescribable" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: touketsumizu [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2008 00:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it!!! I hope you write more kagome/hiei stories!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2007 02:02 CST
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Ah, that is just so very satisfying. ^_^ I just had to read it again. It's all so beautifully-written. I think you had Hiei perfectly IC in this. And I love it that it was through his POV. Your descriptions of what was happening to him as he was dying, and his interaction with her as she saved him was just wonderful. And I loved his struggle to understand what was going on inside of him. This was a real treat. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2007 19:34 CDT
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WHAT A CUTE STORY............HIAI WITH IMOTIONS LIKE THAT IS TRULY AMAIZING....HEHE............NYUKA
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2007 00:25 CDT
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Bravo! That was simply terrific! I loved the explanation of what she had done by sharing her life force with him and how it affected them both. Nice, the way watching Kurama chase her helped him define his own feelings a little more. I loved the idea that she sought comfort with him, even though he never said a word or even came down from his tree. His thoughts about how the others couldhave comforted her better were really, really well done. Aw! It was very sad that she lost her grandfather, though. And the way he presented her the stone as a way of asking if she wanted more of him, -- well, it was perfect! So much was said between them without him really saying anything. Beautiful. And I love the idea that he had never kissed anyone before. I have SO often thought, that as a "forbidden child," and with the isolated life he had led, he would most probably be inexperienced. So, I've always found it interesting that he's usually portrayed a lot more like youko -- having great sexual prowess. (Then again, if he's been around for a couple hundred years, I guess most people would ASSUME he had SOME experience. Heh heh!) But, I really love the idea of an innocent Hiei. And I've often pondered writing up a little story portraying him that way myself. But you did such a fabulous job with this, that I don't need to. ^_^ I really loved it!!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2007 23:07 CDT
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This is utterly fantastic!!! I am just blown away by the first chapter. The writing is so beautiful -- so haunting. I loved the way you told what happened that put him in that state, whle at the same time describing his "afterlife" so evocatively. His thoughts about himself, Yukina, and his friends were so PERFECTLY expressed -- it was very REAL. And his thoughts about King enma and the possibility of him being reincarnated, and how in the world he had been allowed to be put in such a body in the fist place -- it was all so thought-proboking. I most especially loved the phrase, "Life was truly unfair to those it did not want and cast into death." Good Lord! Where have you been hiding this?!!? I need an alert for all your stuff, dagnabit! Now I have to read the second chapter! this goes straight to faves!!
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Reviewed By: wudelfin [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2007 08:25 CDT
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that was written very well. ha the fox didn't get any LOL
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Title: first kiss
Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2007 22:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
my goodness kagome stole his first kiss! . . . usually they write him as someone who isn't at all sexually innocent, i liked this hiei. . . lovely story, eloquently written even if it was a bit verbose. . . ~ . . . thank you, ginny
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Reviewed By: animeboysrock23 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2007 21:29 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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awesome
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Reviewed By: SKnFS [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2007 23:59 CDT
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this is intriguing so far, Hiei sure has a lot on his mind for a guy about to die but i can't say i blame him. He's been through a lot. I look forward to Kagome's explanation. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: animeboysrock23 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2007 14:24 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
plz continue
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