Reviewed By: dragon88 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2007 08:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love Saix (I can do the thing over the I, the commenting box just won't let me do it, god dammit). And I love the way you portrayed his character. It's a little out of the ordinary from what I've seen of him. He's usually quite vicious and absolutley mad (that's a fun one, but it gets a little dull after the first thirty times that you read about it). My only grief is that you seemed to make it more in a poetry format than in a standard writing format. It is good to make new paragraphs when necessary, even singling out lines so that they have more of an impact. However, you might want to ease up on doing it so much, as the majority of the fiction is one-lined paragraphs. Otherwise, it was quite good. Wonderful really, I reread the part where he lingers over kissing Xemnas and...well now I can't get the picture out of my head. And you said that this could potentially end up being an animation~? I most certainly would love to see it.
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