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| "S.H.Y" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: Excellent
Reviewed By: Mother_Wolf On: April 28, 2016 20:25 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
So, I have been a fan of Gravitation for years, and I must say that
you did really well with conveying each character's personality
type with the actions and dialogue. The only thing that would have
synched it a bit more for me is if you had calmed the cussing down
a bit in the dialogue itself and included, at least once, Yuki
calling Shu "brat". -- Grammar is a big deal to most but not
entirely. I could understand what you were getting at and although
there were some spelling errors, it's not biggie. It was still a
nice read and the descriptions yielded excellent results for the
reader's imagination in order to picture Yuki, Shu, and Hiro acting
and doing the things that you were picturing in your mind as you
wrote this. --- I'm a published author, actually. The first book I
have out is called "Tattered Soul", and it can be found as an eBook
and paperback. I would highly suggest paperback to anyone due to
the formatting. However, my book, "Tattered Soul", has a lot of
grammatical errors due to the fact that for the first half of it I
was just winging it. I had never intended on publishing it
officially when I started writing it. I simply wrote it just to
write. But when I was encouraged to publish it by friends and loved
ones, I decided to finish the book and actually go through the
process of publishing it. It is entirely not meant for young
readers on any level, and some of the scenes are overly descriptive
when it comes to the sexual nature (to the point that I'm not
really proud of it any more) and I will be publishing a revised
edition of it after I'm done publishing another book that I've been
working on for about a year now called "The King's Journal". TKJ
has absolutely nothing to do with Tattered Soul and is written MUCH
better with proper grammar and spelling, aside from dialogue here
and there, and is acceptable to be read by kids 12+ in age. ----- I
used to be an active user on here with the name "MaroonWolf" and
posted Tattered Soul on here, chapter by chapter, and had over 100
reviews. Some where angry "flamers" that started crap while the
vast majority liked it, gave constructive feedback, as well as
encouraged me to publish it into a real book. So I took it off here
and finished it, published it and moved on. After I publish TKJ,
I'll be finishing the sequel to Tattered Soul and publishing that
too. ------I really liked you did here. If you ever have any ideas
to write a novel that wouldn't be based on copyrighted characters,
let me know. I'd love to help you! Thanks for a fantastic read. I
see that this is actually rather old so I don't even know if you'll
ever see this... But IF you do ever see this, shoot me and email
and let me know. My email is viaamanda2010 AT g MAIL dot COM. (not
sure if MM.org will allow emails to be posted in comments so I did
it in a 'sneaky' manner that I hope you can understand) ^_^ Hope to
hear from you. Take Care! ~Amanda Wilson
| Reviewed By: Bubblez-of-doom [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2008 01:29 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah!!!!!that was awesome you have put my writings, and imagination to shame!
| Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2008 11:06 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
That was a fun read! Thanks for writing.
| Reviewed By: eien_ni_kawaii [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2008 14:57 PDT
Comment/Review:
i'd like to see what happens next =)
| Reviewed By: dresslikeinuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2007 06:42 PDT
Comment/Review:
Pretty good. But please finish it!
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