| "Lost Time" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: o.o On: December 29, 2002 22:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Comment/Review:
Burning green ice? I think you sould lay off the ice for a while, it is confusing. I don't think Kaiba would ever use the term "air head". Also there is a repetitive use of the word "handle". It seems like a "private eye" plot. |
Reviewed By: pingpong [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2002 08:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a great read! Keep it up and you will go far! |
Reviewed By: Brockiepoo15 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2002 19:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Loved it! So dark and haunting! Love Seto Kaiba! Keep it up and write more!!!!
-Brockiepoo15 PikaRppr1 =)
p.s. That was great with the 1st person speaking ( I ) Really brings out Seto Kaiba's character! I love to write in 1st person and POV'S!!! |
Reviewed By: Maruni On: June 17, 2002 10:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not another Mary Sue in this section. Try to make your fiction more interesting by not having a yugioh-character falling in love with an OC |
