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| "Retreat" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: TOSoldtimer On: January 23, 2016 12:32 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic. Poor Kenshin has PTSD, and it doesn't help that Karou is
sadly lacking in self control. She needs a course in anger
management. Maybe Kenshin should study the peaceful art of pottery
with Hiko. Really enjoyed this unique fic.
| Reviewed By: J Luc Pitard [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2007 05:53 PST
Comment/Review:
The life of a hermit may have its appeal, but from the manga, it's apparent that Kenshin needs to be among people. He craves the need to protect them and finds forgiveness in the simple chores he takes on. (I'm just now starting the anime and they portray Kaoru much harsher than the manga, I think.) I do like your characterization of how difficult his lifestyle would have to be. The brutal memories combined with Kaoru's ideal world and fairy tales is wonderful in support of the mood of the piece. Nicely done, even if I don't agree with the basic concept.
| Reviewed By: ponine_meliara On: November 24, 2007 07:55 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just one thing: you're spelling Kaoru's name wrong. It's K-a-o-r-u, not K-a-r-o-u. Interesting story.
| Reviewed By: gure On: July 27, 2007 21:52 PDT
Comment/Review:
That was very well done. I love the scene-cuts, and how you left Kenshin's problem a little open ended by not explaining what, exactly, is wrong, leaving the readers to draw their own conclusions. I was starting to get a little worried about Kenshin, but the ending was just perfect. Great characterization of Hiko, and I really liked the sense of peace at the end. As soon as Kenshin made it to the clearing, the feeling of the piece changed, and well, I just really liked this. Nicely done!
| Reviewed By: Yanagi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2007 20:56 PDT
Comment/Review:
This is really good. I hope Kenshin finds what he needs. Excellent work.
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