| "The Last Order" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: Fireheart125 On: August 07, 2008 15:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Super story, I like how you made the characters totally differnet from other stories!! :D Continue please!~
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Reviewed By: Passerby_Dyl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2008 03:44 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Amazing. I have 1 favour to ask though. PLEASE dont kill Jiraiya. Maybe if Naruto knocks him unconsciess or something. And I think that Naruto should join Orochimaru. But, it isnt my place to ask you how to write your story :) But please dont kill jiraiya lol.
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Reviewed By: naruto rules [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2007 09:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i think they should make a return to the wave country
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Reviewed By: Izcane On: December 20, 2007 16:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A very interesting story, and amazingly good! Those Jutsu's that u made are are incredible they really sound like a real jutsu in naruto, and in conclusion i only have one thing to say to you: get the next chapter out soon!
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2007 12:43 CST
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Hmmm, how interesting a story. I look forward to seeing more of it. Still, how did Naruto seal Kyuubi, and for what purpose? Is it that he just doesn't rely on it's power when fighting anymore? Or is it something else? On top of that, how did Sasuke leave Oto? These and other questions, I'd like to read. Personally though, I don't think Sasuke is the same person he was when he left the Leaf. What if Orochimaru is just sleeping at the bottom of his soul? What would be his style, I think. Anyway, keep on updating, this sounds somewhat interesting. Ja ne.
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Reviewed By: great On: September 27, 2007 01:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter retakes the pace you set on the first making it quite enjoyable.Just one comment a mission to protect a Mizukage in a foreign shinobi village would not be C ranked, actually the Haku/Zabuza arc was far from a C mission grading for some information was concealed however if the Mizukage called for the byakko specifically it would work better. Congrats
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Title: ODD
Reviewed By: Mirena [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2007 17:37 CDT
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I like the premise of the story and I have no objections to the first two chapters they were quite good, however the last one is contradictory. Did you just wanted to make Naruto's wife vanish without even introducing her? Naruto is strong and fast and in the given case bad luck had gotten her killed he would have hunt the killer down for then there will be nothing tying him down he is not in the best terms with Konoha anyway. The second part is no better Ok they bribe him into training a team, fine but He just got his wife killed in front of him how good is he? and well the council we are afraid of you but we will allow you to train this 3. Sounds a bit odd.
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Title: GOOD!
Reviewed By: Little Ant [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2007 17:32 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I like the story, inclusive your idea of Naruto getting banned from Konoha... quite interesting. Keep up the good work, and for the destination...why not the Wave-Country, to protect someone, maybe a bridge builder...since Naruto gives them the bell-test, why not a similar mission.Please continue writing.
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Title: update of chapte
Reviewed By: kyunn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2007 00:06 CDT
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when is the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: dragoon-tyjet [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2007 04:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just like with your first this is a great start. However you have to spell check and revise your work more before posting. Unlike the other fic however thee are no plot busters for me to comment on. This is a good sign. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: kyunn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2007 11:55 CDT
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ok why couldn't naruto just kill the anbu that had his wife girlfriend whatever again. i mean if i was him i would kill the person the minute she was let go.
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Reviewed By: charity-nicole On: August 12, 2007 18:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good job and keep up the good work i really like the story!!!
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