| "Fallen Eden" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Title: Amazing!!
Reviewed By: green integration [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2012 20:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well what can I say, never have I taken to a story as I have yours. I was literally hanging off every word it was beautifully written! All the characters were beautifully crafted and well I absolutely loved baby Bulma the way you described her was too cute! I think my favourite quote was when vegeta told he already knew she was slow so he would just carry her, that was well just had me smiling! Then their was the whole high king talking to the queen about vegetas hair and what did she want it to purple or blue, I loved that little would they know that his child would be a lavender coloured prince!!! So I looked at the update 2 years before the last and well know its been two years so my friend I do believe it is time for an update to this amazing story don't you think??? |
Title: WOW
Reviewed By: Tyree [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2008 19:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow.. i was pulled into the story wen i began to read it. It was a different take from other fanfics.. this is the most unique story that ive read thus far. :( i was disappointed that the whole story wasnt up so now i actually have to do my homework instead of procrastinating! but over all this is the most enjoyable fanfic ive ever read! i cant wait to find out what happens next!
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Title: ch4
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2008 18:35 EST
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Awww that was such a sweet Bulma and Vegeta interaction I loved this line : ""Of course not! I already know you're slow, I'll just carry you." " I can't belive what happened to Bulma in the attack, at such a young age to be scarred like that.
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Title: ch4
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2008 18:23 EST
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Nappa nooo! poor kakarrot (fingers crossed that everyone ends up safe) p.s Selei and Zarbon seem to have chemistry, as if they were lovers or something in the past, there is such fire between them. I quite like watching them argue, selei has quite a temper on her, I can't believe zarbon talks to her like that, lol
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Title: chap 3
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2008 17:47 EST
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Oh my gosh that was so sad, i didn't want King Vegeta to die, I wanted to see more of him, I thought it was adorable the way you showed him interacting with Bulma, she is so cute and lovable as a child. I realy enjoy the way you delay the revelation of events, such as the entrance of freeza, and the death of King Vegeta, I felt it was particularly effective with the death of the King, the way you described the reactions of the saiyans, at first I was confused, wondering what on earth had inspired such rage and frenzy, then the way you showed their grief made me realise. Also, the subtle description of little Prince Vegeta's reaction to a loss he is unsure of but which grips him just the same, wow, very emotive. I wonder what happened to Bulma, and how will the others escape freeza's wrath?...this is a brilliant story. The only criticism I have is with your grammar at times it disrupts the flow of the story, but overall I really enjoy reading your fic, and can't wait to find out what happens next.
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Title: Hm...
Reviewed By: Gardian [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2008 10:58 EST
Comment/Review:
I've only read the prologu thus far, but you've captured my attention with just a few simple paragraphs. I think I'll keep reading.
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Reviewed By: earlsblueeyedangel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2007 22:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! Where is more? I was so rivited by all the words that I did not want leave my seat to even use the restroom. I can't wait for more!
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Title: Whoa
Reviewed By: Typicalteen [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2007 21:27 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
...Whoa...o.o. I am instantly pulled into the compelling event of things. It makes it hard to tear my eyes away from each word. They underlying words keep saying 'read me' and even if my house were on fire I'd still sure enough be sitting here reading this fiction. I'm really enjoying the descriptive factor of this fanfiction. It enraptures me and gets my heart beating faster with anticipation. Don't stop, I'm really into this and sorrow would befall my soul and heart if it were to end so suddenly and so soon.
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: Typicalteen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2007 08:13 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, you're very talented. This story, with each word, was beating within me. Each sentence that rolled through my mind brought a burst of colors within my vision, enclosing me in your world of fantasy. Very good job, keep it up.
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Title: Intersting
Reviewed By: StaindGT [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2007 17:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't think i ever read where someone first began with Vegeta's parents. I am really interested in where you will take this. It's great writing.
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