Title: Pokemon Reborn Reviewed By:Raichu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2007 01:54 CDT Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 5 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10 Overall Rating: 3 of 10
Comment/Review: Story starts off well. However, "bike electrocuted by Ash's Pikachu leading to new female companion" is unoriginal. Gratuitous translation of Pokemon speech into human speech is frowned on these days. You have to have a good explanation why a human can understand a Pokemon. Why would Vickie offer to give away a Pokemon if she loses? Unless it's one she doesn't want? You'll need to have something realistic in mind here. You've entered your whole story in the summary. You'll need to put in a new summary that's much shorter. It needs to be something that will interest a reader enough to want to click on your story. Good grammar and spelling. That's always good to see with beginners.
