| "Do You Believe In Magic" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Title: Cool!!
Reviewed By: Twilightlover On: December 10, 2008 20:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am a major Harry Potter fan!!I was looking for a fan-fic that was not cliche, and I found it!!You did spell Hogsmaede right by the way.Anyway it's really nice to read a fan-fic that is original.They are really hard to come by!!Your story expresses a pairing that most people would just scoff at and stop reading. To be honest I was going to do the same thing but the fist chapter was extremely good and I couldn't stop reading after that point!!! It is so very well described that everything is so easy to see.By the way Draco's eyes are actually a cloudy grey.It says so in one of the books.I'm sorry but now I have to be a critic, though ther's not much to comment on!!Your format is just fine but switching POVs like that can really mess you up or other readers!!Other than that and Draco's eyes your fan-fic is really great!! Keep writing, Twilightlover
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Reviewed By: Silviata [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2008 12:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
I enjoy the concept you've got going with Draco and Hermione but I honestly don't think they're always in character and that makes it hard for me to get into. I would also suggest that instead of labeling who's point of view the story is in you could simply keep it all blended together. The story would flow smoothly, and by using a character's thoughts a reader will probably know who's point of view the story is currently in. I hope you do not take offense at my critique, I do like your story and your ideas, I just think that your writing could be a little stronger. :)
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Reviewed By: dantes_inferno [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2008 16:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
I Love this Fic its so sweet! keep up the amazing work!
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Reviewed By: dantes_inferno [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2008 16:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
I Love this Fic its so sweet! keep up the amazing work!
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Reviewed By: TamTam/MoonStar776 On: June 24, 2008 16:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a great chapter and I think that you are a great writer.Please update soon,my friend and I are completely obbssesed with Harry Potter and I know she'll love it!!But you need to keep updating and be dissolved in the story because I am!!and my friend will to.
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Reviewed By: envy hatake [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2008 08:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is the first time I have ever read a Draco and Hermione fanfic and I must say I loved it! It's very well done, please continue this.
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Title: ohh
Reviewed By: dantes_inferno [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2007 15:09 CST
Comment/Review:
Ohhhh this is soooo good i love the storyline of this! its so cute - this fic is so not lame. x
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Reviewed By: bookworm182 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2007 17:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
please continue the story. its so sweet it brings tears to my eyes. i love you story!!! pwease pwease pwease finsish storeee.
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Reviewed By: catherine! On: September 14, 2007 14:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awh! thats so cute update soon!!
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