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| "//.Angryhiss" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Phoenix Hoshika [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2007 04:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First tip: Don't beg for reviews. I know how you feel, but it takes away from your story (and gets you a speech from me). People can't dislike your story if they don't read it. As I'm typing this I see your story only has four hits and I'm certain it's because of the lack of detail in your summary. To be honest I only clicked on this story out of curiosity since the summary gave me no clue what it would be about which brings me to my third point. The smiley at the end of short sentence that serves as the summary for this fic made me a bit leery about reading it and that I think is the second half of what turned people off from reading it. It's obvious you put work into this so at least try to put more effort into your summary. Even if it is only one sentence long at least give potential readers some kind of clue what the story will be about. I'm sure once you do that your story will get more hits, but don't be discouraged if your hit or review rate doesn't dramatically increase. Sometimes folks just don't want to spend the time or effort it takes into writing a proper review, which is totally their prerogative. As for hits to your chapters some of us are too busy writing our own stories to stop and read fan fictions written by others so don't take it personally, okay?(The fact I've read and am typing such a long review for your story is very rare for me indeed!). I really like your style and you don't miss a beat with details so kudos to you on that. I can't say reading angst is fun/pleasurable so the rating for the enjoyment factor only shows how interesting I think the story is so far. It would be nice to see how this fits anywhere in Kingdom hearts universe maybe some revisions are in order? If not this would definitely do well as an original fiction since nothing in the story so far ties it to Kingdoms Hearts.
| Reviewed By: Phoenix Hoshika [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2007 03:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Technical stuff first- some grammar issues and misspells but good otherwise. I'm assuming by the description of brown spiky hair the character is Sora. That being the case what a dramatic change since the end of KHII! Sora doesn't strike me as the type to take crap from anybody. The story is very angst indeed, but doesn't seem to have anything to do with Kingdom Hearts, at least judging from this first chapter. That being said I hope this isn't based on something real and if it is I hope writing this at least provided some stress releif for you.
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