Reviewed By: glasshadow On: May 06, 2008 02:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
An interesting premise. You proceed well, and have the basics of the characters down. I understand that you are trying to do something short, but I suspect you have the ability to take this up from interesting and enjoyable to something really quite lovely, if you would but slow down a bit. Dig into Kaoru and Enishi. Yeah, we're all familiar with them, but this is fanfic, and an AU fanfic at that - expand or develop or delve into what we already know. I do appreciate that you've used this scenario as part of plot and character rather than just smut. Good luck on the next parts!
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