| "One Last Chance" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Title: Seto Takahashi
Reviewed By: sportstud [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2009 19:20 CST
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Another writer who doesn't finish a masterpiece tsk tsk. DAMMIT IF YOU HAVE GREAT STORIES LIKE THESE FINISH THEM THEIRS A DEPLETION OF THIS KIND OF STORY AS IT IS.
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Reviewed By: pewter_wings [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2008 20:17 CDT
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Awesome story, really good writing. I am glad to see you back too. As for Shessomaru leaving Rin with the humans, did you see the part where he kept giving her gifts of clothing? I've been told that means he is still watching over her and will someday come back for her.
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Title: pewterwings
Reviewed By: pewter_wings [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2008 23:17 CDT
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You want a review? A real review? Ok, I see problems here. Nothing that can't be fixed, but there are several HTML issues, a few grammatical problems and one very large style issue that just sets my teeth on edge. Still want to hear from me? Let me know. Oh, and thanks for letting me know that I can link you.
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Reviewed By: jflorea [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2008 21:14 CDT
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Nice chapter. Finally back in the Feudal Era! I loved the way Betty Lou handled herself with the 'miko'. Poor Shippo is still hurting...just like Inuyasha. Betty Lou may be in for a rude awakening about wandering off on her own. Both Betty and Inuyasha's lives have been so hard and sad...makes one hope they find some happiness. I agree that you can't bring Kagome back. First of all, her soul has been reincarnated already so Betty Lou would have to die for Kagome to have her soul back...just like Kikyo when she was brought back. Also, it wouldn't be a pure wish becuase wishing a dead person back would be totally selfish...it's the living that want the dead person back and while I totally understand the desire, it is anything but an unselfish wish. I'm glad you know where you're going with your story and I'm really looking forward to reading more. And don't stress about an update schedule...real life has to come first *sigh* unfortunately...LOL!
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Title: pewterwings
Reviewed By: pewter_wings [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2008 12:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say, this is one of the better AUs I have read. Have you ever read 'House of the Moon'? That kind of good. Where else do you have this posted? Are you going to other places and telling people? If not, I would love to place a link of this on LJ and a few other places.
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Title: Great work.
Reviewed By: flame-washu [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2008 10:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry, but now I can write a real review. I love this story, it's great. Don't think that i don't want to read this because I really do, but i'm going through a crisis where I'm just not comfortable with my writing or stories. I have to be able to learn to be happy with what I write, I read Ch. 5, cannot, and I mean Cannot wait for your next update.
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Title: angsty
Reviewed By: Kourinthehunter [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2008 11:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice and good angsty lol- I like it! You show a firm grasp of Inuyasha as he is in the manga and I appriciate that. I like the idea of yet another Kikyo/Kagome reincarnation that would most likly give them a piece of her mind! Too many fanfics picture Kagome as a helpless little twit and yours, although we're talking about a reincarnation, doesn't do that. This one seems like she can stand on her own two feet and has realistic problems. Thank you, your story is a joy/sadness to read.
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Title: pewter_wings
Reviewed By: pewter_wings [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2008 21:35 CDT
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An OC who is not a Mary Sue. I think I could kiss you. I really like how you are really getting inside of Inu's emotions. Nice touch.
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Reviewed By: jflorea [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2008 16:56 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Great chapter! I loved the interaction betweek Inu and 'Betty Sue'. She must have been so wierded out to see Inuyasha. Can't wait to see how Inuyasha tells her everything and how she reacts! I also thought it was a nice touch for it to be her 15th birthday when he finds her! Inu should give her a birthday like she probably hasn't had for a long time! Of course, Hiro might handle that a little better...lol Looking forward to more!
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Title: Awesome!
Reviewed By: flame-washu [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2008 10:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are awesome!
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Reviewed By: DeadlyNightShade [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2008 20:53 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I've actually read the manga in which Kikyo dies! *sobs* it's really very sad! Go to www.onemanga.com, they have a massive list of scanlations. with Inuyasha, and it's updated to (I think?) the final battles with Naraku! I suggest also, reading the chapter "Compassionate Heart" I've never seen Sesshomaru in such an upset, caring state before, pulls at the heart strings! Great story! Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: jflorea [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2008 23:17 CDT
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Inuyasha must feel so alone...everyone he has ever really loved is gone. That will make him incredibly afraid of letting anyone else get close...to protect himself as well as them. Will he try to see Kagome's mom or Souto before leaving for America? It really does seem an impossible task but if they are soulmates perhaps fate will step in. Don't be discouraged about reviews...you seem to have a lot of readers and you are writing an interesting story!
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Reviewed By: Jessie Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2008 23:30 CDT
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Loving this story so far. I was so heart broken after reading that initial chapter. The angst was thick and it really got to me. I also really liked that you brouht Inuyasha to the future as oppossed to making him wait 500+ years. Thats very original. Can't wait to read your next chapter. :)
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Reviewed By: jflorea [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2008 23:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Wow...I can't believe I'm the first review. Your story is interesting and very well written. You've connected with me on an emotional level...the mark of a great story in my opinion! I cried right along with Inu at Kagome's grave! Why does Inuyasha need Sess's help? I'm so excited to see where the story is going next. Please continue writing!
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