| Reviewed By: concerned fan On: October 15, 2008 17:07 CDT|
Style of Writing: 3 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10
I'm sorry, but you should consider rewriting this. It's oblivious Malice is a Mary-Sue, and NO ONE wants to read about your Mary-Sue. Also, you use to much character description, and that gets really boring, and is another Sue-ish trait. So it would truly be in your best interest to rewrite so you don't embarrass yourself.