| "Flux" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: AngelsRebellion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2008 23:22 CDT
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Interesting, I'm looking forward to reading more. You can never go wrong with a buzzed Vegeta!
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Reviewed By: Avarion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2008 16:14 CDT
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Once again, thank you for the wonderful reviews! For the past couple of weeks I haven't been able to devote enough time to chapter three but now I am very keen to plunge myself back into it considering the warm response I've received thus far. Please keep checking back for updates; I just might be able to upload the third instalment by the end of next week.
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Title: LOVED YOUR FIC
Reviewed By: tiemyf On: August 17, 2008 21:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow I really loved your fanfiction, the way you right is so attractive I can't stop reading it... Please continue I can't wait to see what's gonna happen... kissu
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Reviewed By: lovesreina [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2008 02:06 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well written... I really like this! Please do continue to update it. The dialogue is especially good. :) Keep up the good work, and I'll be looking forward to your update!
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Reviewed By: Avarion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2008 05:15 CDT
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Thank you to the anonymous reviewer for such a gracious compliment! If you think this is a depressing lack of reviews, you'd be appalled by the response I've received on AFF.net!
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Reviewed By: not a member On: August 02, 2008 00:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is great! Your writing style contains a lot of depth, and I'd really like to see you continue with this. I think you could do a lot for the characters; you know how to write and develop them properly. Your transitions are smooth, and this is very pleasant to read. I look forward to the next installment, and I hope you continue regardless of the depressing lack of reviews; you deserve them though. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: Avarion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2008 04:32 CDT
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Marc105, your review has put a real smile on my face, and I wouldn't worry about it not being constructive; on the contrary, it was a wonderful pick-me-up! I do hope you continue to enjoy my work; it's very liberting to write again (and be praised for it).
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Reviewed By: marc105 On: July 31, 2008 19:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really enjoyed reading this and I'm sorry my comment can't be more constructive but I am, unfortunately, completly uneducated in writing fan fics, having never attempted it myself. I can say, however, that this is a very enjoyable fan fic to read and, like jeck, I appreciate that there is finally an author who knows how to use correct punctuation and grammar (although I myself am probably failing that task right now). Loved this and your previous chapters, and am looking forward the next installment.
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Reviewed By: Avarion [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2008 17:16 CDT
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Thank you so much for you kind praise and honest criticism; I truly appreciate it. So far my references to Yamcha's characterisation are allusions. Most likely he will be introduced in Chapter 3 as I want to properly explore the relationship he has with Bulma, as opposed to the path some writers take of merely stating that he's a philandering Lothario and leaving it at that. I'll hold my hands up to admit that I'm not exactly sure where to place my story because it's been some time since I watched the anime. But yes, I am striving to do justice to the characters as I don't believe that Yamcha is a cheating simpleton, and I don't believe Bulma remorselessly gave up her relationship with him to be with Vegeta. But aside from that, I can sincerely say that it's a tremendous joy to be writing this story as it's the first time in around three years that I've attempted to give fiction another chance (albeit fanfiction). I'm so relieved that you find my prose natural; as I write I can't help but feel it's quite the opposite. Again, thank you for taking the time to review. It's made my evening.
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Reviewed By: jeck On: July 31, 2008 02:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are already off to a great start as you are among the select few authors who actually know how to spell and write correctly. Not only that, your prose is not forced and reads very naturally. You seem to have mastered for the most part, "show, don't tell." About the only suggestion I would make is to release more because there's some things that need to be established that hasn't been such as what will Yamcha's characterization be. You've already hinted at it and I can infer that Bulma and he are still together but nothing else is really known. Is this post or pre-GR explosion? I'm assuming that you're attempting to write a canon in character fic, of course. Although I enjoy AUs as well. All in all, a great start. I look forward to reading more from you.
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