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| "Kenshins Love" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2008 22:31 CDT
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google: HTML code special characters -for a chart to make things like diamonds, hearts, clubs, etc. . . if you are interested in my artwork or my story, the addresses are on my profile page, just click my user name. . . the reason i am reviewing again is that the above was eaten when i attempted to post my review. ♣ a pleasure, ginny
| Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2008 22:25 CDT
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as i said, your writing is eloquent and interesting. there is still the problem with lack of line breaks... you can do it as your author's notes show, now all you have to do is put them in the body of the text. put something like: ♥ , ♣ , ♠ or ♦ in the lines between your paragraphs, then you can be unique. & hearts;
| Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2008 14:16 CDT
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well written story. only problem is that there is a serious lack of paragraphs and line breaks (a few empty lines that separate paragraphs). . . start a new paragraph when there is a change of subject, scene, thought etc. you should start a new paragraph when there is a change of speaker or if their speech changes subject. . . and watch for the mediaminer gremlins!! they like to eat line breaks. ♣ ginny
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