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| "Faded Scars" Reviews/Comments [ 26 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Reviewed By: logan (the author) On: July 26, 2008 17:41 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hello again lkcwu, First and foremost, would you be willing to move this off the review boards and to email? I hate it when people use the review space for conversation. If you're willing my email is logan91235@aol.com. Thanks. Well I have to applaud the fact that you apparently research your reviews. I wish more people did that. The only problem is that you are going under the assumption that I am re-editing when I repost, which I obviously do not do. I don't go back and rework finished stories as a general rule. I believe that once something is posted there shouldn't be a "take back" option and that for the good or the bad you live with you wrote and just try harder next time. It seems to me that if you did constantly go back and rework old pieces like this story, you would be doing it forever which I obviously have no desire to do. Faded Scars is a finished piece and though it is an early effort and a flawed one at that, I am not going back to it. Faded Scars was written when I was about 16, and at the very least it's a good example of how I have grown as an author since then. For instance, when you publish a novel, you don't get to go back a month later and rework it because you've decided that you didn't like something, you live with it. I am a better author then when I wrote this so don't make the mistake of confusing preservation with lack of growth, BELIEVE ME I know this is a grammatical nightmare and that the premise behind it was seriously flawed, it's just an example of where I was as an author seven years ago, I've since moved on. Thanks for the review. -Logan
| Title: One more point to add...
Reviewed By: lkcwu On: July 25, 2008 23:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
I saw your response, and I find it ironic that you claim to have matured and that now you're ashamed of this fic. In fact, you had a chance to redo this fic to make it better when you chose to repost this on FF.net in 2006, 4 years after your original posting. Indeed, I went back to see that reposted fic and found it still had the same flaws: faulty grammar, poor characterization, illogical flow of ideas, etc. If anything, the fic is identical to the one here minus the sex scene. You haven't made a single change or improvement AT ALL! In fact, you claim the sole reason for your repost is to comform to the ratings system, not because you feel you can do better. So you're telling me 4 more years of writing and life experience taught you nothing? It's perfectly fine that you go back to being immature and writing sex-crazed lemons even after realizing your mistakes? Or have you not matured at all during that time? I know this is harsh, but I'm just responding to your claims of being a more mature person. Right now I just find it hard to believe, so you tell me what to think...
| Title: response to lkcwu
Reviewed By: logan (the guy who wrote the story) On: June 18, 2008 22:43 CDT
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Dear, lkcwu You're absolutely right on all counts, looking back at this one has me wanting to find a rock to slither under. I'm glad to say that I've grown a whole lot in pretty much all points since I first penned this one. (Or at the very least learned the difference between then and than) thanks for the critique. -Logan
| Reviewed By: lkcwu On: June 16, 2008 20:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
I saw some negative reviews of this fic on FF.net, and when I read the whole thing here I realized why. Some people said that you never bothered to "solve the problem" in the first place, and it's true here. So they're suicidal, then they turn around and start having sex like it can heal them. But really it doesn't prove they can deal with their pain; they're just shifting it elsewhere and covering it in wave after wave of orgasms. You said you felt sex "intensifies relationships," and objected sex when "two people are not deeply in love." You even said Matt "rushed" things while Tai took it nice and slow. But when you're suicidal an hour ago and are having sex an hour later, then it clearly shows they're "rushing." Your logic here is totally wrong, and it almost seems like you're just finding excuses to put them together in a sex scene rather than truly writing a "love story." And it didn't help that your grammar is horrendous. End your sentences with periods, start your sentences (and names like Tai, Matt, Sora) with capital letters, and use proper spell-check. Seriously, if it wasn't for the sex scene, someone might mistake your writing for that of a five-year-old. So overall, it's a bad fic, and yet according to your FF.net account, you re-posted it a few years after the original went unaccepted by its policy. So during those years you couldn't have gone back to make this thing better? You have to keep feeding us the same crap over and over despite you've "matured"? Stop making excuses about people's rating systems and start writing quality for a change. It'll make you better that way.
| Reviewed By: Taiora Lover45 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2007 19:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are awsome!!! I loved it!! Logan you really are a great author! You know me from fanfiction.net! Well you rock!!!!!!!:)
| Reviewed By: Ax On: June 26, 2005 06:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg....I've said that another digimon fic was the best i've ever read, and I was wrong. This takes the cake easily! I really love the poem at the end, did you come up with it? I have an account here as Lord-of-Anime, send me an email if you have time because this is without a doubt the best fic I have ever read.
| Reviewed By: AirCrystaline [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2004 20:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I remember reading this on Fanfiction.net a couple of years ago and I thought it was one of the absolute best Taiora fics I'd ever read. I read it again and, it still is an Awesome fic!
| Title: Magnifico
Reviewed By: Nomey On: June 15, 2004 22:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bravo!! BRAVO!! ONCORE!!!!! MAGNIFICO!!!!!!!! STANDING OVATION!!!!! This was the absolute best story I have ever read!!! You, sir, truly know the way of the heart and love. You should think about writting romance stories as a career for you wouuld get the gold metal. My email is explosive_gnome@yahoo.com if you want to contact me.
| Reviewed By: flurch On: May 22, 2004 21:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was soooo beautiful. i dont agree on some stuff about it though. I cut myself but im not suicidal but i get what ur sayin. end the bit with tai almost killing himself made me cry cuz i was wondering if that was what it was like for my uncle when he shot himself.
| Title: Turn the A/C on!
Reviewed By: KhakiBlueSocks On: May 21, 2004 22:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've been reviewing fanfiction stories for a while, and I have to say, this is my first official Lemon fic I ever read. Believe me when I say I am NOT dissapointed! Embarrassed, yes. Dissapointed, No! Perfect in every way! You are a skilled writer, and I urge you to keep it up! Don't let censorship stand in your way!
| Title: I bow before the Master...
Reviewed By: Merciful Sky On: January 26, 2004 21:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh....wow. That's all I can say. Here I was, bored out of my mind, avoiding homework, and I stumble upon this fic. I practically cried through the whole thing (I'm actually crying right now). This has to be one of the most beautiful stories I have ever read. It definately pulled at some major emotions deep within me. *sobs* I want someone to love me with that kind of passion! I'm kinda sad now, but still very happy that they found love. I bow before thee...
| Reviewed By: jenna On: November 02, 2003 16:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*to stunned four words*
| Title: Dooooooooood
Reviewed By: Lucky Bug On: October 05, 2003 00:19 CDT
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I think I need some glasses....I'm tired as hell, It's like 12:08 A.M. o.o That is the longest fugin fic I ever did read...(lmmfao @-->'fugin') omg...I think i went cenile....lmmfao....heh..fugin XD!!!!!! I make up the stupidest shiz when i'm half asleep...anyways...nice fic....LMMFAO XD!! FUGIN!! XD!!!!
| Reviewed By: ---------------- On: August 03, 2003 01:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
my. god. this story is great i... words cant describe it | Reviewed By: cosmic teapot On: July 22, 2003 01:54 CDT
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This has ben one of the best stories I've ever read! A lemon WITH a plot is something that I very rarely see out there! Someday I hope I can have 1/16th the skill you have when it comes to writing fanfics! Someone flamed you? I sense a little jealousy! | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] |
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