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| "What might have happened if..." Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Jasonlord On: October 22, 2002 16:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all: MORE, MORE, MORE! What does Minmei have to say about all this? Will she suddenly become interested once the possibility that she might lose Rick come up? MORE, MORE, ahem...sorry. Overall it was very good. I think that since you set this up as a play or screenplay, you need to indentify the characters. It was fairly easy to know who was speaking but it did get confusing at scene changes. The Rick-Minmei-Lisa triangle has always been to me the strongest emotional threads in the whole Robotech saga. Your view is just the thing fans who can't get enough of asking 'what if'. Well done. | Reviewed By: SchezarLass On: August 21, 2002 18:30 CDT
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Ah, so this is what your writing is like with punctuation, lol. That was great, so easy to follow and so much in character. The opinion that a previous reviewer provided about making it into a play is what I felt, too.
My favourite line, "He is blind because he's in love with someone else." Although I love it, doubt that Rick would be so confident as to assume it's him or would he? | Reviewed By: Aragonvaar On: July 13, 2002 13:17 CDT
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I'm favorably predisposed towards anythng designed towards anything to shortcircuit the Lisa-Minmei-Rick loopdeloop, but in addition it's a well-written piece :) | Reviewed By: alphavt [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2002 21:32 CDT
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Great touch for how the characters interact! And I have to admit, it's a lot more satisfying then what acutally occured!
You know, you could make this into a play out of it... Especially since the no identifiers gets confusing when there's more than one person in a scene, and it's primarily dialogue regarless!
Incidently, causality would suggest that in this alternate universe, Fokker might not have died. The events leading up to his death unfold here differently, so he might not have been in the location of the space/time continuum where the Zentraedi cannon rounds intersect with his Veritech. |
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