| "Sweet Passion, Raw Love" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2009 04:28 CDT
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To be honest the first was rather.... bad sorry no soft way to put it the second one was ok the third one was much better you are improving speeling is a big thing for me when it comes to enjoying a story or ficlet. Proper tense is another and keeping things straight is the third. I can't offer really any major advice as I'm not a perfect and/or professional writer. Just keep certain things in mind like spelling tense grammer and keeping the story straight and always always read reread and if you can find someone to be a beta have them read through once for you as well. Other then that keep writing. Practice makes perfect is the saying and doing is the only way to improve so keep writing.
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Reviewed By: ponygirl2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2009 09:22 CDT
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I liked them. You may want to watch the her/he's though, you have her quite often when it should be he.
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2008 06:01 CST
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This was pretty good for a short PWP. ^_^ That's something I haven't tried to write yet, but maybe someday ... ^_^
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Reviewed By: InuGuardian On: December 06, 2008 08:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. It's sweet, yet at the same time very naughty and kinky!
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: December 05, 2008 22:41 CST
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I LOVED this fanfic!!! You have a knack for lemons.^^ I hope you plan to do more oneshots and maybe some stories... :P
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