Reviewed By: Gardian [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2008 21:47 CST
Comment/Review:
Well written, if a little on the sparse side of details as to the surroundings. The main character so far is well thought out and interesting. Takeru's appearance wasn't too well described (ex: hair color, eye color) and so I immediately thought of Miari Trunks when you said "sword" and then the sensei I thought was Gohan until you actually gave a name. Other than that I think you've done quite well for so early in the story. I'll be adding this to my favorites list, so I hope you write more soon. I don't mind the whole idea that everyone is stronger than they are in the anime, it won't truly change anything if the strength hierarchy doesn't move around.
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