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| "Burn" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: You're a wonderful Yaoi Writer
Reviewed By: MarilynMonroe [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2009 19:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good masterpiece. Keep writing.
| Title: You're awesome :]
Reviewed By: dreamcaster555 On: January 16, 2009 23:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
1. I quite enjoyed your style of writing, only it got a little confusing at times. 2. ...Which bled over to the grammar of the story. The spelling and grammar weren't all that bad, but the format was a bit rough and didn't always read well. I would suggest getting a beta reader to just give it a quick proof read before you ship it out. 3. This is VERY original, and I'm in love! 4. OF COURSE I'M ENJOYING IT. 5. I'm dying for the next chapter, that's my overall rating! But just a little tip: It's pretty annoying when you insert author's notes with things like "I've never done this or this before; I'm sorry if my characters are OOC, etc." If you don't say anything, nine times out of ten we the audience won't notice or care. I don't mean to sound harsh, but you should have more confidence in yourself as a writer. This is really a great fanfic, and an AU one at that, so don't start off every chapter with an apology -- be proud of what you put out there. I'm really looking forward to your next chapter. Awesome work. :]
| Title: MOAR
Reviewed By: The Soup On: January 10, 2009 19:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoohooo! This fic is so awesome! ^_^ I'm really enjoying this. Despite what you think, you're doing awesome with the characterization, and I think it's awesome how you vary the view points. The only thing I really think needs work is the paragraph spacing. Makes it easier on the eyes and little easier to follow the action and dialoge. Roxas' "falling" chapter was good. Very well written, so much so I didn't mind how short it was. When he was describing the sensation of flying before falling, my stomach dropped like it does on roller coasters and thrill rides. Well done! Also, I checked out the YouTube video you were talking about, and I got CHILLS while watching it. ^_^ Which reminds me... I've been inspired to work on a AMV that has to do sooooo much with your story, it's scary. I've been thinking about doing the video for a while now, but now I have the extra push and inspiration to do it! And, as a bonus, I'll dedicate it to "Burn" and when it's done, I'll review the latest chapter and include a link with it. So, I'm sorry if I'm sounding like a rabid fangirl. I don't mean to scare you off. ^^;; I just decided to give you a really long review since you said reviews make you update faster. Update soon! --The Soup
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