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Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 21:02 EDT
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wow! very powerful. can't wait for the next chapter. Great job...
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Reviewed By: mutgaba [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 18:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ooooo, this chapter was awesome. i especially liked the bit about the fury in Vegeta's eyes when Bulma offers herself to Thorn, haha. keep up the good work! can't wait for ch. 8 :D
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Reviewed By: Kinky Typo [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 13:48 EDT
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Wow. Just wow. I love the predatory violence in this chapter. Two males fighting for the rights to a woman. Intense! I must say I love how you made Bulma still hold onto her innocence against the bloodshed but at the same time show her understanding for it. I love how rational you make her (unlike in a lot of other fanfics out there). I might sound like a dork but I'm so glad you updated today. My husband and I are going up to Virginia until next Monday and I was so scared I would miss your update. It would have KILLED me with suspense! Now I have a NEW chapter to look forward to when I return :D One more side note, take a peek at this drawing if you have the time: when I read this I was like "this is how I invision Vegeta too! The bad boy dark murderous Prince!" http://kinky-typo.deviantart.com/art/Sketch-Page-Vegeta-Close-Up-114567443 There's just something sexy about a man that will spill blood for you :)
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Title: Loved it!
Reviewed By: Tiffy On: April 15, 2009 12:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW is all I can say! WOW! >__
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Reviewed By: Nintendocat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 12:13 EDT
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How horribly dramatic but, as usual, well written. I love your descriptions of the characters and how do you continue to make Bulma a strong character (great comment to Zarbon). I can't wait to see where you take them next.
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Reviewed By: Medeia [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 06:48 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Frankly, its refreshing to read a more subdued Bulma then the cursing screaming sluty fishwife I'm used to. This way she's more feminine and Vegeta is more inclined to protect her. Its been awhile since you wrote a story and I'm very glad you're back.
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Title: Good work on these next chapters
Reviewed By: Trynia Merin On: April 13, 2009 22:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
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I have to say I really enjoy the premise of this fic now I've read more chatpers. I love the idea of Vegeta and Bulma beign stuck in a cell without barriers and having to get to know one another because they're both victims of circumstance. Having to be laid bare and maintaining emotional barriers is close to impossible. And I like the level of sexual tension. It'a a very believable premise and I'm happy to see how it's unfolding.
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Reviewed By: Kinky Typo [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2009 18:50 EDT
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I justed wanted to say how much I truly loved that last chapter :) Wonderful just wonderful. I liked it so much that I had to do another fanart for it :D http://kinky-typo.deviantart.com/art/Free-My-Heart-119156758
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Title: Chapter 6
Reviewed By: catgirl26 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 22:59 EDT
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Ooooh, I really liked this chapter. It's interesting to watch them get to know each other in this sort of situation. I would like to see Bulma react a little more to Vegeta's gruffness, instead of always understanding and accepting it, but then again, I guess if I was locked in a room with a naked Vegeta, I'd be pretty damn understanding of him too! *drools* I was so excited when I thought Bulma had figured the collar out, so now I'm really itching to see how they beat the damn thing. Alo, like some other reviewers have said, I really don't mind your talkative Vegeta. He's in a weird place, mentally and emotionally, so I think we readers have to accept that he's not going to be the same Vegeta we know (Our canon Vegeta is free, not an imprisoned slave with little hope for anything better; of course some of his normal bravado is going to be missing!) and I think you're doing a good job of it. Keep going with your gut feelings. I know I'll still be reading!!
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Reviewed By: Konoha Ninja [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 16:47 EDT
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I don't feel that Vegeta is too talkative. Not that he'd ever admit it, but he's just found a kindred spirit, someone with some of the same problems, and they can relate. I am really liking this story and am looking forward to the next update. Well done. :)
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Reviewed By: Nintendocat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 14:51 EDT
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I don't see any problem with Vegeta talking as much as you're having him. What else is he going to do, glare at Bulma each time she talks? Your way is much more entertaining. I love how they're both having trouble with their feelings towards each other, even though they're both just concentrating on the lust factor for now. Can't wait to see how their further attempts at escaping play out.
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Reviewed By: pisq On: April 12, 2009 14:38 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another excellent chapter. It's amazing how fast you're updating. I'm loving this Vegeta, if anyone can make him talk it's you!You manage to pour his soul out in four words! LOL. I hope Jeice and Zarbon can't see what they're up to with the collar.
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Reviewed By: mutgaba [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 13:01 EDT
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oh, i'm in love with this story already. i'm thrilled that you've picked up this couple again! i can't wait to see where you're going with this! despite your concern about your talkative Vegeta, i think he works. he may be more talkative than we're used to, yes, but he's still perfectly in character. case in point: he's saying all of the things i would expect Vegeta to say if he opened up more, ya know? keep up the good work! can't wait for the next chapter :D
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Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 10:42 EDT
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Cries!!!!!! I like vegeta this way. i'm getting a better picture of him like this. it's like opening up a door to his soul,for just a second. Wonderfully done. Stay true to what your heart wants you to write.
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Reviewed By: Evil-Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 07:03 EDT
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Three simple words: I LOVE IT! Thanks for another amazing chapter..but gods the suspense is *killing* me!!! but I love the way the characters are unfolding :) If you ask me Vegeta's character is like it should be, but I must say that that's the case in all your fanfics about him. I think in all, that you're a better judge of his character then me because i know that I could never stay so true to the charater of our sinful sexy saiyan prince! I'm looking forwards to the next chap! Lovies EV
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