| "Hellfire" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Madyamisam [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2002 19:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the idea of this war thing going on. Great job. Grammars a bit iffy but it's cool. What happened to Ash's best pal Pikachu?
Yami: He ate it
*smacks him with her trusty 1000 tonne mallet*
Yami: @()@ |
Reviewed By: yankeefan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2002 09:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This Fanfic keeps on getting better and better. I really liked the car chase it was cool. There's more spelling mistakes but that's ok. Keep it up! |
Reviewed By: yankeefan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2002 16:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The Story so far is really cool but the problem is that you have many spelling mistakes otherwise it's a really good story. May I make a suggestion that you should have more people working for Ash instead of just soliders like some Gym leaders from Kanto. Keep on writing more and more! |
Reviewed By: Sheya [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2002 02:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Comment/Review:
I liked the story, I have never seen one quite like it. It had me wishing for more . . . . But the format hurts the story you should have blank lines between people talking and have paragraphs (well more than 2 paragragraphs anyway) with each change (ie. someone different is talking or you are going from one person doing and talking to another person doing and talking). You should also get rid of the smart qoutes some computers can't read them. I think you should flesh out the first chapter a little more. It is a great concept and you should continue it; as you write you will get better . . . . I really wanted to know more about the characters . . . . I had only one real problem with the story: It's a Pokemon story so . . . where are the Pokemon? You could have been writing a story about Jack and Marcy, in a land that had the same city names as the ones in Pokemon. Well that is all I can think of I hope my critiique has helped. I really do want to see more. --- Sheya |
