| "A Friend in Need" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Title: awee
Reviewed By: star65432 On: April 14, 2012 05:18 EDT
Comment/Review:
So cute ^_^ this www a very cute story. Good job :) |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2011 18:09 EDT
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This is a great story and i can't wait to see what you have planned for the next chapter!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Violet62 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2010 03:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
It's a really sweet story.You made Vegeta very romantic,affectionate sweet guy. Great job ! PS:But I do not like the idea Bulma carrying Yamcha's brat. I hate Yamcha ! Don't worry, I still like your fic! Keep writing!
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Reviewed By: Rihannon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2010 00:54 EST
Comment/Review:
Awww!! Nice mushiness. Not complaining at all.
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Title: A friend in need
Reviewed By: Drisea On: January 15, 2010 05:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the idea of the story but, and please take no offense to this, It feels as if you are rushing. Take time out to write details, like when Bulma suddenly rushed up the stairs and bumped into Vegeta, take time out to describe his expressions, maybe what he was wearing, or where he was coming from, as well as Bulma's emotions from bumping into him. One of the easiest ways to draw in readers is details. So please, don't just be concerned about getting the chapter written, write down what you see in your mind, every little detail, emotion and expression counts ;)
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Reviewed By: Phixie On: January 04, 2010 02:42 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was one of the sweetest vegeta and bulma get togethers that I have ever read, its nice to see vegeta as a sweet and sensitive guy. I really hope you continue the story, I can't wait.
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Title: Dun dun da dun!
Reviewed By: msissyburrows [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2009 22:42 EST
Comment/Review:
Wasn't expecting to have it end that way I hate Yami more and more as I read the fics! I need to find one where Veg does beat the tar out of him! Maybe this is the one!! Hint hint! Please update soon!
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Title: :D
Reviewed By: melancholicsins [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2009 11:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like it its interesting and it kept me hanging i wanna read and know more. :D
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Reviewed By: AngelsRebellion_logout On: September 26, 2009 14:58 EDT
Comment/Review:
I like it
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