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Reviewed By: Inuyashalover161 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2010 07:50 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
im sorry but i do not like your story this is sick why the hell would i grown man pine over someone he considers a daughter you are twisted sesshomaru thought of her as a daughter i could see how rin grew a crush but you made him look like a closet pedophile i dont like this at all i like the first ending better then the second the second one was sick and very inappropriate sesshomaru for the record would never touch rin! he thinks of her like a daughter she is his ward nothing more learn that face that stop trying to make him a pedophile !!!!
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Reviewed By: Fanfactor [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2009 18:04 CST
Comment/Review:
I like this story there is just one problem. In the 1st chapter Inuyasha is already born and only three years younger than Shesshomaru, then in Chapter 2 he's 8. You might want to fix that. Plus, OmG is a rather overused. I really do like the premise of this story though
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