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| "Messing with Heat" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] | Title: Girl needs
Reviewed By: Lady_BlkDia07 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2011 12:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, I am thrilled about this fic and I am in love with being in your fic and u let everyone imagine their own scenario with Zuko; but if we are talking about a girl here, why doesn't she have her period? I mean, I know they don't talk about that in the anime or manga...but if this is a 'every body' fic for girls, lets be real and include all the imperfections and hazards of being a girl from 'our world', right? Ur story rules and I hope you update soon! | Title: Ideas!
Reviewed By: PandaRawr [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2011 10:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Here are some ideas you can use! No need to give me any credit, I would happily share my ideas! 1. PLEASE make this last throughout the ENTIRE series of Avatar, up to the last chapter and last episode. 2. I know that last one might be hard, but could you also please stop having Iroh watch 'you' and Zuko all the time? Its...creepy XD 3. Love triangle involving one more guy, 'you' don't love him, but he loves you, that makes Zuko jealous. 4. Under some circumstance, have 'you' have to help out the avatar because of your morals, and that might make Zuko angry or jealous. 5. Have 'you' "predict the future" becuase since you already know everything that happens in the show, have something happen like you tell Zuko about the drill at Ba-sing-se or something like that. 6. Let the avatar find out that 'you' are an airbender, causing the avatar to want to kidnap you from Zuko to teach you airbending. 7. Make Aang fall for 'you'.(since your the second to last aribender) 8. Maybe make someone else from 'your' world to appear to shake things up! Makes the story less predictable. 9. Make 'you' have some hidden power that isn't something like you bend more than one element. THAT power is taken...make it something like...you have unbelievable strength? Or something like that. 10. Only make you and Zuko *do it* near the end please, because if it is too early, it will really ruin the fic. Okay! those are my retarded ideas. By the way, your fanfic inspired me to start my own AnimecharacterxYOU fanfic, about an anime called Tokyo Mew Mew. Im not trying to copy you, but I just thought it would be cool if other anime series also had a characterxYOU fanfic. Haha, your fanfic is great, just do me ONE last favor, and fix your spelling and grammar! :3 well thats all, love your work, bye! | Title: HILARIOUS!
Reviewed By: Pandalol On: June 01, 2011 22:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
HAHAHA omg SOO funny! And not to mention I adore Zuko. Its unique too! .....can u meebee add ecchi? Pleese? lol sorry but I want me and zuko to do sumthin ecchi X3 | Reviewed By: Bandchick On: July 13, 2010 17:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love Love Love what your doing!! Keep it up, can hardly wait till the next chapter and those that follow!! ;)
| Reviewed By: sesshomarujc [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2010 15:52 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed reading this. I hope you finish it. :)
| Reviewed By: BoredReader On: December 06, 2009 04:03 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think you're doing a cool thing here, because I've never seen a fic this original before. Your characterization is good, just sometimes a little off or abrupt (I think that defines it...). The only things I would desire is more of the gaang in there, because that was Zuko's main goal there, but you're doing a good job mixing things up. Also, your actions concerning the couple are getting predictable. Not a bad thing but there's a lot of "needed hugs" and Zuko is looking like a cryer way more than he should be. Not trying to be mean, I'm giving opinions and healthy criticism, use it how you wish. Other than that, you're doing good. Keep up the great work!
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